As You See

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As You See

 

As you can see

             The face of an old fellow,

             Thereat, find me with the saying that says

             ‘I love you’!

 

As you peel the skin

             To unearth the innermost thing

             The heart that sinks

             Only for you, forever…

             Offshore, just recognize it my dear!

 

As you star in the mid-sky

             I fall nearby in search of Moon,

             Though at first,

             You just call me, and I can stay there

             Like I start…

 

As you feel the wound

             That bleeds nowhere, but on deaths; there

             Can you find your dear one’s crying like you do the same

             For the lose.

 

As just stay on top

            When I can meet you

            Like we never depart,

           On the spot!

Reviews

[Nicole (Carpe Diem)]

very nicely done... very enjoyable to read

[Gandré]

hmm this is extremely ambitious poem, you are quite articulate writer. my favorite line was :

As you peel the skin To unearth the innermost thing The heart that sinks Only for you, forever� Offshore, just recognize it my dear!----------full of trust...

[Sparrow]

The originality in this piece was impressive. In a site so full of fantastic poems, it's hard to be original sometimes. Especially when what you speak of is such a commonly shared feeling, such as love lost/found/longed for. I adore the fierceness of the enduring love you've painted so masterfully. Thank you for sharing your talent with all of us.

[J.P. Bristow]

I enjoyed this immensely.....your rhythm and language flowed well with nice cadence...looking forward to reading more of your work.

[Ms Jessica Renee]

Very unique writing my dear. I thank you for sharing it with me and I look forward to more.

[Emily Elizabeth]

I loved the format here, very unique, and sweet! A very simple but heart-felt poem, you have such a romantic and delicate style, one to be envied. You have so much love and inspiration, it really shows in your poetry. Thank you for showing me this!
x

[Kitty]

This is sweet...

Nicely done!!!

Josie

[Ray Hamilton]

Nice piece
Thanks for sharing Ray { Not a Poet }

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A truly beautiful and heartfelt poem. Full of love, passion, sincerity and warmth. A pleasure to read. Thank you for directing me to this piece. You are such the gifted poet.

Sharla

[The Autumn Faerie]

This piece is stunning!
One of your best, methinks.