Life through the eyes of a child

By: Fallon & Nicki Young

 

I open my eyes, all seems so fresh so new

As I lay here, all goes past or through me

The clouds, the sun, the stars, the moon

Eternally just out of my reach, forever free

 

I touch the grass, first with my hands

Then my feet to eventually sink into the lushness

It feels so strange beneath me

So warm, so soft, so caring

 

All is within my reach

Life in the palm of my hand

I see no ending, no time in the sand

I never look back and never give up

 

I have no worries, no concerns

You give me all I need

With love, laughter, warmth, I feel secure

For me I have no need for more.

 

In the blanket of love

With guardians and bastions by my side

And the stars to light my path

My soul will shine forever Bright!

Reviews

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

Wow this is a good poem...i really like it...you did a wonderful job...i love the visual you give me through this poem...the flow and everything fits great in this poem.
Great Job :)

[Dragon Witch]

I do think our writing styles can gel very nicely. I think we should write together more often.
Love you
Blessed be

[Jinx's Heart]

Very nice. It flowed effortlessly and the imagery was immaculate. Such a sweet, soft poem. Very, very nice!

[Blackrose]

Really good job :) It gave great imagry, really let u understand what you where trying to get across :) I loved the metaphors, good job :)

[Bhavya Kaushik]

This is such a deep and thoughtful piece of writing!
I simply loved the way it flowed out here so flawlessly...
"All is within my reach
Life in the palm of my hand" - Brilliant usage of metaphor here!
Overall, a great piece of writing it is...
Thanks a lot for sharing it here :)