Always Mine (lookin' back)

"Eights 'n Sixes" (see "Author's Notes" below for rules: I would be honored if any would like to try this original form, and any who do, please let me know)

   Always Mine

~~·~-~**~-~·~~·~~·~~·~~·~~·~-~·~~

Oh, Darling, see how I miss thee...

while you've been gone, My Dear.

Each starlit night two souls take flight

on wings of loving care.

Mine travels far to where You are

in search of your sweet touch,

and everywhere I look with care

for all we've shared so much.

Those days bygone still linger on

right here within my heart,

I know yours, too, has remained true,

ne'er are our souls apart.

It matters yet, I'll not forget;

your tender affection.

That moon above knows I'm in-love,

You are my perfection.

I know I'm less, I must confess,

than all you might desire,

but hold me tight with all your might,

stoke high my burning fire.

Be ever glad for all we've had,

'tis long our hearts now wed;

that blossomed rose of ours that grows

drank every tear we've shed,

and when it blooms, its sweet perfumes

caress us once again.

Tho, heard it's told not all is gold ...

to Thee I've this refrain:

"If all the stars fell from the skies,

the sun and moon, both failed to shine ...

if every sea and river dries,

still in my heart ~ You're always mine."

~~·~-~**~-~·~~·~~·~~·~~·~~·~-~·~~

   Richard W. Jenkins

             ©2015

Author's Note

"Doubledown Style 1 (or) Eights 'n Sixes"
Original form created by
Richard W. Jenkins
© 1 Apr 1987

Any number of 4-line verses about anything:
Aligned left or centered.

Syllable count per verse:
8/6/8/6

Rhyme scheme:
xxxaxxxa
xxxxxb
xxxcxxxc
xxxxxb

xxxdxxxd
xxxxxe
xxxfxxxf
xxxxxe

Etc...

(not part of the form: but, in this poem, ending with an 8-count, a-b-a-b rhyming quatrain envoi)

Honest constructive critique is always welcome! ✍

Reviews

[Writergurl]

"If all the stars fell from the skies,
the sun and moon, both failed to shine ...
if every sea and river dries,
still in my heart ~ You're always mine."

If there is nothing left like the sun and moon, and river dries
then love wouldn't exist. Love creates everything beautiful.
But I get what you mean. This is wonderful and beautiful

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, writergurl 😌

Your praise is so inspiring, and the interesting comments added just the needed touch this humble piece needed.

Many blessings sent your way! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Unspoken poet]

Very unique form, I enjoyed this, it is beautiful...

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Kimmie Dear

For such such lovely compliments and choosing this rather poignant piece to read.

Blessings true! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Unspoken poet]

not a problem....

[Richard🖌]

It's nice to know there's no problem.😏

[Unspoken poet]

i sent ya a message....

[Cherrie Palmer]

Richard my friend you strech our imagination with your poetic offerings. This was beautiful.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you most gratefully, Lady Cherrie🍷

Goodness, you really took a stroll back through by repertoire to find this star-kissed piece.
Your gracious words of praise and expressed appreciation truly bless and touch a humble bard's hopeful heart.

May your Autumn day be amongst your loveliest, Dear Poetess! ⁓ Richard 🍃

PS: For rhyme and flow practice, you should set your imaginative pen free by composing one of your own in this exciting form.😏

[no tell writer]

"If all the stars fell from the skies,
the sun and moon, both failed to shine ...
if every sea and river dries,
still in my heart ~ You're always mine."

If the stars fell from the sky.... Love that line so much, it gives room for hope.
if the sun and moon, both failed to shine... Leads so a hope that it will again

What a wonderful write, built around one little word called "Hope"
Nicely written.

[Richard🖌]

Why thank you most gratefully, Katzie 🍂

Your graciously warm words of expressed enjoyment, understanding, and praise have truly blessed this bard's hopes of writing for at least one special individual who will know and embrace my feelings and meanings … harmonizing so nicely, as we seem to.

Yes, M'Dear Poetess, "hope" is, indeed, a beautiful emotion.
Warmest hugs to thee!⁓ Richard 🍃

PS: You should try writing in this form … I know yours would be beautiful. 😏

[Cassie]

How did I miss this wonderful piece of artwork!!!! I love it

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Cassie 🍂
Again, the warmth of your presence sets the page softly aglow … I, too, do not know how you missed it, but how thrilled I am you came upon it, leaving me your special touch. : )

That you love anything about me, er … what I do sets so-so softly within! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[kitty]

A sincere pledge from a lover's lips and heart spread across a page ~ for all the world to see that he for her is meant, then and for eternity! Shows too a certain tenderness and deepest love for thought time and circumstances have kept the lovers apart he wants her to know that there is a love that can transcend the tests of time. Warm and tender feeling of 'ownership.

[Jade]

Ever so lovely and wonderful. Very poetic

[Richard🖌]

Good Wednesday afternoon, Brandie🍃
You always have the nicest, most inspiring things to say about my poetry.

Thank you ever-so gratefully! ⁓ Richard : )

[Jade]

maybe you can help me out, Do you know where I could a place on the net to help me write a Sonnet.

[Richard🖌]

Brandie,
As a poetry teacher, I have taught many how to compose the Sonnet.
If you would like, I'd be proud to teach you, too.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

What a fun time this was for me but you deserve some points......Oops...pressed the button to soon...Here you go.

[Richard🖌]

LOL!
I often do that, Kathy … the site allows edits on gimped reviews, ya know. 🙄

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Richard,
"Always Mine (lookin back)
This poem is a reminder of how reality and its meaning stays real to our souls. Relationship is so important and it is given and prominent position in this poem. "those days bygone still linger on right here within my heart. I know yours too has remained true, ne'er our souls apart."
It is like this one person-memory and love is the gold standard and is treated as such. "If all the stars fell from the skies, the sun and moon both failed to shine...if every sea and river dries, still in my heart your always mine."
I am tickled by your word choice too as it lends to the very sound of the feeling brought forth. Don't know if I am making sense. Anyway, I had such a nice time reading.
Bless you.
Kathy

[Richard🖌]

Kathy dear,
When you write a review, there is always a sense of rapport that connects us in such a deeper, more meaningful way through the essence of your words than I might have expected; thus, you repeatedly surprise me with the pleasure of your open-minded keenness and grasp of my work.
You make perfect sense, Kathy, and I am warmly blessed to receive your lovely presence.

Most grateful thanks to you, dear lady-poet … hugs! ⁓ Richard : )

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Richard,
I know that you must work hard to create the correct presence for your experiences-emotions. This was like a story in poetic form and I found it really satisfying. Being able to relate to the work of another is so nice! I hope you continue to grow as a writer and please keep being an inspiration.
Your response here is more than kind. In this world kindness can go a long way.
bless you sir!!
Kathy

[Kathy Van Kurin]

You are much more polished than I and I desire to see you just shine cause you deserve it!

[Richard🖌]

We each gleam with our own special flame, Kathy ⁓ your gloriously bright and soft unto the heart and soul*

[Richard🖌]

"yours" gloriously bright and soft unto the heart and soul*

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Hey there you are just having fun and I love it!! Words surely are your gift to bestow flames of beauty from the heart and soul! Bye for now. Mr. Richard........................

[Richard🖌]

Bye, Ms. Kathy,
A most wondrously beautiful afternoon to ya, m'lady! : )

[Tabby Mac]

One thing I'm admiring in your work is the ability to write in a variety of genres. I work in free style. It's impressive to me and as I have been trying a few of your styles it is a challenge to make something of caliber. It's easy to write: the bird is red...like I have said...what color do you see...no, it's not blue...joke is on you...etc... 4/4/6 making funny little rhyming attempts.
For you tho it reads so smoothly and genuinely touches the soul as it is taken in. For this I commend! Your poetry truly takes the reader to another place, has depth and passion! So far in every piece I've read a naturally romantic tone has been behind the words. Out of the heart the mouth speaks a good heart yours must be!
--My favorite part in this piece--
Be ever glad for all we've had
''Tis long our hearts now wed
That blossomed rose of ours that grows
Drank every tear we've shed
That stanza has me GEEKING OUT!! LOVE IT!! Very powerful lines there!! Profound beyond words can explain!! Well penned! You have exploding talent in poetry!
Tabby

[Richard🖌]

Tabby Dear,
As a long-tenured teacher of poetry, it is natural that I would venture forth into many poetic genre, styles, and forms … out of necessity, if for no other reason.
But, over the years, I've learned that, like musical notes, melody, and rhythm, etc; do, there is a poem most suitable to more powerfully express every kind of thought, feeling, and emotion; and, I've, also, found it true that a poet will seldom derive at this understanding on their own; instead, settling on one or very few forms as their bread-n-butter choice(s).
In effect, no particular form will best accommodate and express everything … yet, many (perhaps, most) believe their favored choice of form will, and their skills are, thereby, stunted. Yet, is it not each poet's prerogative to compose in whatever manner they so choose, or to advance to whatever level suites their desire and passion?
Then, a teacher's commitment is different … they are compelled to further the art of poetry at every opportunity offered, where potential, desire, proper work ethic, attitude, and willingness exists and is expressed.
I offer this purely from the attentive, simple eye of a teacher.
That you've you been attempting a few of my styles is encouraging, indeed, Tabby … any assistance you may wish, just tap my shoulder. : )
As in most anything new and worthwhile we aspire to accomplish, performance improves according to degree of understanding and practice … with your potential, depths of feeling, thought, emotion, and grasp of syntax and grammar, I think yours could be virtually boundless.
The accuracy of your insights of me are uncanny, but in the way you express them, I find it very comforting and enjoyable … not in the least threatening.
The verse you've highlighted, I consider the core of this work … and, I'm not at all surprised you chose it.

Your shared thoughts and feeling have blessed me … thank you, Tabby! ⁓ Richard

[Tabby Mac]

Well that explains a lot! Haha
I indeed will tap on your shoulder when ready. I could use wisdoms and guidance in writing for sure! I enjoy and am comfortable with my style but I love to challenge myself for the better know matter the aches and pains it may take to get there!!
I am excited to know this about you and inspired to learn and get better. As well as try new things! It can only amount to good. Falling up hill still gets you higher! Hahaha I do that a lot! Thank you for taking the time to explain and share with me your talents and where they come from! Your passions for teaching, and poetry burst through your words like a burst of wind but gentle like a well awaited breeze!
My pleasure Richard.
Tabby

[Richard🖌]

Tabby,
You speak with the heart of a consummate poetess, one that captivates and inspires … ever-so gratefully yours! ⁓ RJ