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Senryu

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Author's Note

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Reviews

[wu]

At the risk of sounding clche: This is 'beautiful' imagery.
At the risk of loosing a friend before you make one, first thought: wings don't fall.
second thought: how delightful it could have been if it were 'flying like lace crystal wings' instead.
third thought: Richard's given it more thought than I have, I'll go with the poet.
last thought: I wonder if this what he meant by 'meaningful reviews'.

[Richard🖌]

Greetings, Mr. Abrams 🍃

Thank you sincerely for selecting one of my humble poems to read and critique, for the encouraging compliment, and for sharing your wonderings and thoughts of my own intentions and meanings.
True, normally "wings don't fall," but imaginary lace crystal snowflake wings do. The thought of "snowflakes" flying and soaring up and about (to me) creates a different imagery than that of my mind's-eye … and, I'm thinking to interpret such metaphor literally would undo its intent of fantasy wonderment.
I think your review is in the upper register in meaning, in that it is open, honest, and well-intended toward inspiringly helping to better this piece and my penmanship.

What more could a hopeful bard wish from one of his astute readers than this?

Blessings, my fine new friend! ⁓ Richard 🍂

[Cherrie Palmer]

When you think of the unique beauty of each crystal, we can see the power it holds.

[Cherrie Palmer]

PS happy new year 🎉 my good friend.

[Richard🖌]

Beautifully spake, Dear Cherrie ❄️

With the heart and soft as a snowflake voice of a true poetess.

Welcome to 2022 … happy smiles 'n hugs! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[lightsong]

You already know right? anything with "snowflake" will drift into my heart to steal it away... I remember this one. "lace crystal wings" ok true, so true... little Angels they are, or maybe they are the tears of Angels...

[Richard🖌]

Well, Miss Gh❅unwah Dear 🌨️

Whatever snowflakes are to You* … I know when they're in your mind and heart, they're bound to be beautiful.

Snowflakes over stars; yes I know … hugs! ⁓ Richard ❄️

[Lisasview]

Oh gosh Richard, I read this a couple of days ago and thought I had left a review...
I really like it..
Short but sweet..lace crystal wings..such a lovely image..

[Richard🖌]

Welcome to 2022, Dear Lisa🥂

It's so nice to hear your lovely voice on the first day of the year, cheering for our innocently gentle little snowflake friends.

Here's hoping your New Year's Eve was filled with great joy and midnight kisses galore! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Susan 🦋]

They have a way of doing that don’t they? Such a pretty Senryu! Laced snowflakes! Soft little falling whispers melting into the heart.❤️

[Richard🖌]

Snowflakes are our innocent little friends.❄️

Thank you, Susan, and Welcome to 2022 ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

This reminds me of when I was a little boy and I saw snow falling for the first time. It's a feeling I'll never forget. A wonderful poem Richard.

[Richard🖌]

Snowflakes are our innocent little friends❄️

Thank you, Carlos, and Welcome To 2022 ⁓ Richard 🍃