Smiles.... (lil' bit-a fun)

Cowrite by Cherrie Palmer & Richard … a Sestet Suite in original Quickie form: See "Author's Note" for details. 😃

     Smiles . . . .

You smile at me,

I smile at thee …

all of our world's aglow.

Then, everywhere,

all through sweet air,

we smile again 'n know.

So plain to see

a gift to be …

your smile, once unwrapped, grows.

It fills my heart

and once we start,

feeling between us flows.

Each heartbeat thrums,

throughout us comes

a melody of smiles.

With every chance

in warm romance,

a heartbreak reconciles.

It's never stale,

warms like hot ale …

intoxicates the heart.

Blurring all fear,

drying each tear;

asking, never to part.

With smiles we're blest,

I must attest,

it's yours that rights all wrong.

'Twas just last night

we found delight,

when kisses turned to song.

Is a smile rare

or warm to share

in this world of sorrow …

rare, like a gem

or a po-em,

with love for tomorrow?

Rare as pure gold,

lovers who hold

close, soon will become one.

No matter when,

from deep within …

smiles are pleasures begun.

Cherrie & Richard

   © 8 Apr 2022

Author's Note

Quickie or Doubledown Style 2
Original form created by
Richard W. Jenkins
© 19 Apr 1987

Unlimited verses, any topic:
Two minimum, 6-lines each (Sestet).

Alignment:
Author's choice.

Syllable count per verse:
4/4/6/4/4/6

Rhyme scheme:
xxxa
xxxa
xxxxxb
xxxc
xxxc
xxxxxb

xxxd
xxxd
xxxxxe
xxxf
xxxf
xxxxxe

Etc...

Please, offer any honest critique you believe will help better this poem. ✍

Reviews

[Red Brick Keshner]

What a po-em! And what a flow, from stanza to stanza. I like the shift at S6, almost as if the poetic persona is engaging the reader head on. And S7, like a summation: "smiles are pleasures begun!" I see that you and Cherrie collaborated on this. A hello to Cherrie and thanks as well. Until this point I couldn't tell there was the faintest difference somewhere in the reading. Perhaps, I will learn these salient features as I get more acquainted with the larger body of your works. Thanks, again, for sharing. /Frederick

[Richard🖌]

Greetings, Frederick : )

Thank you for sharing this uplifting, romantically entertaining little number, and for commenting so intricately.
Typically, a cowrite is left to the reader to discern which portion belongs to whom … it's part of the fun. But, since you haven't a clue, here's a hint: Each wrote every other verse; I began.

Top'a th' mawnin' to ya, Syr! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Lisasview]

Ahhh, yes!!! That smile!!
The beginning of something…
Lovers begin the flow with the smile they show…
So lovely to read early this morning in Spain…
Lisa

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Lisa,
For such a lovely, smile-worthy review. : )

Keep smiling over there in Spain! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Lisasview]

Good morning Richard,
You are most welcome!!!
Smiling all the way,
Lisa....in Spain

[Alira]

This piece captures the sweet, innocent side of loving someone very well, the way I see it. The joy you get just from seeing them smile means the whole world. I got a warm feeling reading this, plus the rhymes are quite satisfying and well executed. A lovely piece.

[Richard🖌]

Aw, Alira 🍑

I'm sooo happy you chose this fun little piece to read and review. It was cowritten with a lovely-hearted poetess friend, whom I've written with a number of times, always with favorable results.
I really am pleased you find such delight in its sweet innocence (as you so keenly say), and I love your spot-on interpretation, too. I think we connect quite well through poetry.
Your praise and sense of warmth are so very gratifying to a bard's hopes of pleasing his readers.

Thank you ever-so warmly, Poetess … hugs! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Alira]

Oh, I see now that you mentioned above that this was a collaboration! Well, you two work together quite well. Does she also post on Writerscafe? Yw and always Keep writing, my friend.

[Ken Simm.]

Not really into formal structure that much but here I find enough to keep my buds tasted. The subject and the sweetness of the write. Give me more than enough to enjoy. And I do immensely.

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Ken!

Thanks for reading and enjoying Cherrie's and my little tribute to a few benefits of the wonderful smile.
It's not only great that there are so many genre of poetry to express one's thoughts, feelings, emotions, etc; but, that there are those (like you) who are broadminded enough to appreciate poetic forms, other than your own.

Bless your steps along the way, My Friend! ⁓ Richard🖌

[lightsong]

My favorite verses are the last two ones, You said "a lil' bit a fun" but I see more than that. the magic of a "Smile" the title is perfect and though this seems to be about two lovers but the reader will also read it in the general way too. a smile is simple yet do rare things. You and Cherrie did great job, the poem flows effortlessly and smoothly as one. wonderful and thank You both for a needed uplifting vibes around the Cafe.

[Richard🖌]

احضان اليك غونوة الحلوة 🌺

I, too, like the last two verses … and, am with with you that there is more in it than mere fun; but; each part does have a pleasurable aspect all its own, wouldn't you agree? 😉

Thank you for reading and for your expressed enjoyment and warming compliments … I know Cherrie will love your review, too, Dear Ghounwah! ⁓ Richard🖌

[lightsong]

Hugs Back at You too~~~

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Beautifully lyrical poetic poem! Great collaboration!

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Kathy

For selecting and complimenting this light little cowrite number in homage to smiles and what they can bring. : )

Happy blessings, Dear Poetess! ⁓ Richard🖌

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

My pleasure!

[William Michael Reeves]

This suite is very sweet. Made my heart skip a beat in the poetic heat. And glad you share your unique form which is rare. I'll be studying it with care.

I would have liked something in the notes about who wrote what. Were you answering each other? If I write one, would it be good etiquette to credit Richard personally for the form, or enough to just call the form as you've named it? 1987?!! Are poets writing in this form? Is that something you would copyright?

[William Michael Reeves]

Just looked closer and saw the copyright. Question answered.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Bill,

For selecting this fun, little, romantic cowrite from one of our premiere poetesses, Ms. Cherrie Palmer and myself to read and review.
Yes, we were responding to each other every other verse. Who wrote which is a mystery all cowrites should hold discreetly, to keep the reader wondering … therefore, it's your opportunity to venture a guess. : )
All of my original poetry and forms are copyrighted. When composing in any form, it is always appropriate to include its name and/or its details, crediting its creator, etc.
Over the years, there have been many poetesses and poets who've composed in this form, and you are most welcome to, as-well. If you should need a helping hand, just tap my shoulder.

Again, "Thank you, Bill." ⁓ Richard🖌

[William Michael Reeves]

I wrote one yesterday after reading this. It's laying naked, no punctuation, waiting for me to get a better understanding of it. I'm studying this and other poetry, as well as your lesson on punctuation, before I dress my creations. The sonnet hasn't got a thing on either! Ready to go but not all dressed up. Having a hard time recognizing the right spot for which point.

If I had to hazard a guess, an educated one as Cherrie and I have written together quite a bit, I believe she started this beautiful exchange of loving comfort. She created a monster when she rewrote me shortly after I stepped into the cafe. She knows it too. We might have to agree to disagree about identity. I feel it's important to at least mention in the notes who owns which particularly if a poem is conversational. If I could I would have changed fonts to illustrate that. I do see the value of mystery about authorship. Adds a little intrigue. I'll be pondering that as I find some 'clothes' for these two poems. Yesterday I looked into the sky and saw something amazing. Jotted down a few thoughts for a poem but had no idea what form it might want. Logged in and this was the first thing I read. Quickie Doubledown #2 it is! Thank you very much!

[Richard🖌]

Since you haven't a clue: Each wrote every other verse; I began.

[Cherrie Palmer]

This turned out to be a beautiful read.
I love when a poem has a lyrical quality (your poems always do)
I enjoy writing with you. Even though our styles are different our co-writes bring balance and depth to the piece.
It is always a delight to create a poem with you.

[Richard🖌]

G'Morning, Cherrie 🍒

What a fun and lovely poem we've made … one I hope everyone will enjoy as much as I did writing it with you.
Though, our styles are different, our techniques somehow always seem to compliment and harmonize with some rather nicely creative originality, imagery, and easy-flowing metaphor.

Thank you, Cherrie, for the honor and pleasure of sharing
your sparkling✨pen … until next time! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Susan 🦋]

One of my favorite forms and perfectly suited for a co-write. Nice and easy flow between you two. Well done.
" With smiles we're blest,
I must attest,
it's yours that rights all wrong" ... Lines that caught my eye. Very sweet and an enjoyable read this Sunday afternoon.

[Richard🖌]

For the longest, Susan....

I could not figure out why I couldn't comment on your review down below, and finally, just now, realized it's because it's the "Featured Review" and I'd have to come up here … what an odd thing for the site to do.
Yes, it is a form you've so splendidly composed in and made me feel very proud!
Those few lines you've highlighted are among my favorites, too … "birds of a feather."

Love your sweet, kind, and congenial review. Thank you, Dearest, for enjoying this fun little cowrite … big HUGS! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Susan 🦋]

You’re welcome! It really is quite sweet. 🌸