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Souls Surrender
******************************************************* I sat upon a moonlight ripple
that glide
refractions along
its very edge
the maiden supple recovered
the star
that dance her finger tip
sung sweetly
the light of her lyric wet
falling crescendo
into endless thrall an sail
ethereal tenderness
billowing dress
her caress the dimmer shimmer
I shiver
an evening ends
mooning
lonely
only
dreaming sweet Sara's Song *******************************************************
*** Sara ***
*********************************************************************************** Standing in the Waves
The Moon
Molds to Her Wonder Her Form Loveliness in True Knowing ... Her Feel of Loneliness ...
Magical, mystical write...It transported me from this world into one where fancy reigns supreme... Very very elegantly penned indeed! The beginning is so wonderfully mesmerizing! "I sat upon a moonlight ripple".... Wow! You weave magic through words...
"ethereal tenderness
billowing dress
her caress the dimmer shimmer
I shiver
an evening ends
mooning
lonely
only
dreaming sweet Sara's Song"
....Astonishingly brilliant...fantastic flow...like a flowing river, like a melodious song...
Enchanting write!
Sigh. Radiohead "Fake Plastic Trees"... when I heard that start to play... reading... I just knew it was going to be wonderful! You're created magic, the same one I eat out of the palm of your hands! Great imagery and choice of words!
a nice dream of innocence! I would post this as 2 poems. for I am in the first part of it ... and yet I have to read after the picture... the second one.. and I think the 2nd one gets not enough attention. good job, a positive thought is what we need. 100p - you disabled rating...
Thank you for the beautiful photos and words. The description made the photos come alive. The story was a pleasure to read. Water and woman always can create a beautiful story. A excellent poem.
Coyote
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