HOVERING TREASURE

poem

       A miniscule, wilful, exhibitionist,

         valiantly entered the garden premises,

         surrounded by a worn teak, hexagonal trellis,

         drawn instantly to the flame red tulips,

         ignoring the jack in the pulpits,

         primroses, anemones and hyacinths,

         how rare is this flamboyant sight,

         agile, precocious, light, feathered bright,

         expending vast energy with spirited flight,

         fluttering forwards, reversing backwards,

         then from side to side, compulsively moving

         consumption ensuing,  using its  astute eyes,

         defying, redefining, the very pace of time,

         propelling it’s wings with high speed robotic

         gear, dissuading thoughts of yesteryear,

         flying jewel, hovering treasure,

         equably lapping up, red flower nectar,

         the warm blooded Hummingbird’s

         primal endeavour, with its long, protruding

         beak of propensity, and pious reign of certainty.

        

Author's Note

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Reviews

[HeavenSunArcadez]

Ill never forget ive seen them on rare occasions in my front yard and tried to go run get my camera to take a shot but everytime i always am too late so nowadays if i am able to see another i will just enjoy the moment... your poem is extraordinary... again your imagery is on a whole other level than what im used too and its rare to find a writer that uses such imagery, and paints beautiful pictures with there words.. you are definitely very special and i am very grateful i got the chance to read your amazing writes, and still plan to read more... Uve done a spectacular work, here and i really enjoyed the journey u took my mind on... from movements, to the flowers... not a detail left out... your detail was crisp and grandiose... spectacular !

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Hi there HeavenSun Aracadez !! beautiful, and belated and sincere thank yous for your most humbling-ly flattering review, thank you again. How about it, if I come by and see you tomorrow for dedicated review session? I do hope that you are keeping well, take care for now.

[don't know]

good poem very vivid imagery i like this line defying, redefining, the very pace of time, i think you caught the spirit of the humming bird well in this poem lovely bird and beautiful poem. :)

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Thank you DON'T KNOW, I am pleased that you liked this one :)

[demureminds]

So descriptive and observant! Lovely interpretation (:

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Thanks very much

[Blue Ivory]

The way you told the story was different and refreshing. Love your rhyming! I'm not good at that so I always appreciate it when others are, and you're great with it!

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Thanks so much Siren, I am the reverse, I admire free verse writers and you are one of them :) best

[Blue Ivory]

You're kind :)

[kelvin]

very good description of the hummingbird I hear they must constantly feed to keep the strength to keep those little wings flapping so fast. Beautiful little birds that can intimidate some when they get to close haha

[SHEEMA HUQ]

thanks very much Kelvin,yes, a most fascinating bird, the smallest in the world infact, I figured that this gem of a creature warranted a poetic appraisal

[kelvin]

Yes indeed out does and you're very welcome.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

What a brilliant look at an amazing bird... I love hummingbirds and this poem is awesome.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

thanks so very much for such a fabulous review, means al ot

[roarke]

Yep, it's like that, all of that.

They are also quite aggressive toward each other, different colored birds have some kind of hierarchy, especially around a feeder.

Nature is so inspiring.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

thanks so much Roarke!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A detailed well observed description of an exotic bird Sheema

[SHEEMA HUQ]

thanks John

[An owl on the moon]

This is beautifully extravagant... how i love to pause and stare as hummingbirds hover... truly treasures of earth and sky.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

that's really kind of you Craig, thanks :)

[Pax]

Hummingbird are cute birds and this tribute adds the volume on how a birds life look... i love the descriptive look on this amazing creatures... i find this bird more fascinating among the bird kingdom... wonderful work my friend... great!

[SHEEMA HUQ]

thanks kindly Pax for this uplifting review, pleased that you enjoyed, I love hearing from you, I look foward to visiting you again, sometime, best