UNSEEING HEART

poem

If only life were as simple

 as ‘a walk in the park’,

when addressing matters

 of one’s sullen heart,

traipsing, while thinking,

tempered by the humid

scent of Birch bark, in

itinerant idleness,

unsheathing the

unwrought residue of

vehement pontificating,

eyes are swollen, heavy,

they weep and twitch

with the strong  gust,

eyes feel worn and weary,

they squint at the very

thought of  ‘must...of must, must’

eyes become awakened

when the mind soothes

the unseeing  heart

with  reassurances  to  trust

 

 

Reviews

[HeavenSunArcadez]

The way life is we all go through trials and tribulations... and sometimes those very wisp sent our way are a test, to get us to another level on life, cause perhaps we will need to strengthen in some areas that are necessary for us to better ourselves... the important fact to always take to mind and heart is that life is filled with surprises, and unorthodox unpredictability .... however just as theres seasons in weather there are seasons in our lives.. and sometimes we shut down due to a particular event occurring in our lives... but as long as theres that faith.. inside the heart and glint of light when happiness is yet a whisper away... u summed it up perfectly

"eyes become awakened

when the mind soothes

the unseeing heart

with reassurances to trust"

another incredible write... much kudos to you

[SHEEMA HUQ]

"however just as theres seasons in weather there are seasons in our lives.. and sometimes we shut down due to a particular event occurring in our lives... but as long as theres that faith.. inside the heart and glint of light when happiness is yet a whisper away... u summed it up perfectly"

Thank you, your comments are deeply appreciated :)

[emmajoy]

' .. while thinking, ~~ tempered by the humid ~~ scent of Birch bark, in ~~ itinerant idleness, .. '

Your language is more than extraordinary, you thread words so fluently and seemingly easily yet hold emotions warm and true to your heart. And no, life isn't a 'walk in the park' - if only; tho nature has a magic way with it. Your reflections appear more than sincere, perhaps true .. sadness can be so beautiful.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Thanks kindly Emma Joy for your praise and for your interesting comments, there is 'beauty' I suppose, in melancholy, in loss even, in everything perhaps when written with sincerity and reflection, see you soon

[melodioh]

How wonderful it is to find a poem of substance and genuine craft around here these days.
Keep writing, and posting. Please.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Nice to meet you Melodioh, thank you for such an encouraging and invaluable review, much appreciated.

[Peter H]

If only life were as simple

as ‘a walk in the park’,

love the opening line your words are filled with profound and beautiful charm :)

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Thank you so much dear Peter for your charming review, much appreciated.

[Richard Lane]

I've missed reading your poetry and you never cease to amaze me with your phrasing and I am so glad I logged in today after being away and only posting random poems. You are beautiful in the way you write. :-)

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Dear Richard, thank you kindly for taking the time out to read my poetry during this most trying time, it is always a pleasure to hear from you and I shall be over to visit you again soon, take good care
Sheema

[michael.c.m]

love the narrative aspect and the internal rhyming. "itinerant idleness", "unwrought residue of vehement pontificating..." love the "voice" here. And ending with the universal issue...trust. (smile)

[SHEEMA HUQ]

I'm glad for your dedicated review Michael, thank you so much

[lee von cleef]

Sheema, my father "Casey" Horse's Horse's but man too, his word" Sullen", and a horses eyes spoke to him, and me watching learning, him no explanation,just had to become "Zen" to emulate his natural poetry with a horse,a rope, post hole diggers,people,I know , I know get on with the review, Heart and eyes they are the most important part of a race horse, He could look feel into and see the heart through their eyes,measure it , then train them such that ,their confidence grew, and grew, and the balance point is Trust, are you sure you don't train horses? this poem shows you sure could.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Such a fascinating review from you my friend, I do not have any experience with horses, I have ridden Camels and Ponies only, flattered I am by your encouraging comment, see you soon.

[Pax]

you had me at your first verses:
If only life were as simple
as ‘a walk in the park’
~ i wish it too, but sadly infact its not that easy...i see you conveyed your emotions really well my friend... Great work!

[SHEEMA HUQ]

As ever, I am very grateful for your time and your splendid review Pax, thank you ever so much.

[Reeti]

The rhyming pattern, i'd say, is perfect! I could hear an imaginary brook make rising and falling nuances of sound when i read this. You even have my full consent to the meaning you've conveyed here with your beautiful words. I can conceive strongly that the narrator wants to be naked of his/her bane and unwanted traits. Our hearts are harnessed by our minds, thankfully or else, our insensible desires would extinguish our dreams. Very well done! =D

[SHEEMA HUQ]

I always appreciate the way you review using an academic discipline, which is always refreshing to read through, thank you very much indeed Reeti.

[Reeti]

awe, you're welcome! I don't like being thrifty when it comes to reviewing literary works. =)

[Riley Bray]

That was REALLY good! I loved your choice of words! On the other hand, though, it did seem kind of choppy here and there. But it was an over all great poem!

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Hi Riley, kind of you to comment, an interesting review as well

[Riley Bray]

You're welcome.