Reflection

Reflection

A Poem by Shannon

reflecting on rain
blacktop moonlit holograms
dancing in puddles

© 2016 Shannon


Author's Note

Shannon
All constructive feedback welcome! It's a haiku for those who take note of those things.

For such a tiny piece this one had an interesting genesis. It came out of a process with Lost Soul, with a final word choice made with Inject Positivity. Thank you.

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There might be a million poems that try to describe rain & moonlight, but in this very short one, you've expressed something very original without any clichés . . . quite an accomplishment! I like the way every word is chosen to convey maximum meaning. That's what these short forms are all about (((HUGS)))

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shannon

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much barleygirl. I love wrangling words, sometimes!
Emomoemi Johnson Newcourt

3 Years Ago

Mm. It's such a rarity for a poem describing rain - 3 lines - and yet accurately done. That's talent.. read more
Shannon

3 Years Ago

Thank you for the read and review. I appreciate you stopping by



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Your submission is now read in the http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/Nature%2C-Auroras%2C-Lights%2C-Trees%2C-Water%2C-Outdoors-Contest/54059/ please stay tuned for the winning poems. Thank you for your entry. I loved the poem!

Posted 3 Years Ago


Interesting and a great write. Never thought of rain as moonlit holograms before... good job.

Posted 3 Years Ago


A perfect way to describe the image. Impressive.

:)

Posted 3 Years Ago


Shannon

3 Years Ago

Thank you for stopping by to have a look. The image can after the write. Glad they work together.
i can see the image now,creative thoughts

Posted 3 Years Ago


Shannon

3 Years Ago

Thank you. I like playing with words.
You so beautifully make it easy to see the picture you portray in so few words.



Posted 3 Years Ago


Shannon

3 Years Ago

Thank you Dave, they were a carefully choosen 9 words!
Dave

3 Years Ago

I wish I could say the same. I tend to be more verbose. Now I realize of course that the Haiku is .. read more
Shannon

3 Years Ago

I do tend to treat poems like mental excersize and strip them down to minimum words. Stories.... We.. read more
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I think this serves form well. I very much like inferring something on the surface, but thinking there can be something deeper too.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Shannon

3 Years Ago

This one seems to say many different things to people, especially depending what line holds the mos.. read more
S.Mi,
"Reflections" is nice. Iv'e not tried one of these short elegant poems. I should. There is so much to write about. This is a true picture! Moonlit holograms, creative words. Blessings in all you do. Kathy

Posted 3 Years Ago


Shannon

3 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind words, Kathy. I think I tend to pick different words than many people.
Refreshing to 'see' a well written Haiku

Posted 3 Years Ago


Shannon

3 Years Ago

Thank you. I am curious as to why 'see'?
Wondering Mind

3 Years Ago

The minds eye cannot help but see when reading excellently crafted imagery
Shannon

3 Years Ago

Okay, you must have a quick look at my very first piece on the Café. Don't feel obligated to revi.. read more
I really like this one, its short and simple, but despite that it is still able to get a lot across and even create a detailed scene! :D

Posted 3 Years Ago


Shannon

3 Years Ago

Thank you. I sometimes love trying to choose just a few words.
Lovely..You took nine small words and made them beautiful. I like this very much!

Posted 3 Years Ago


Shannon

3 Years Ago

Thank you Neal. I enjoy carving my poems down to the bare minimum words.

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