JACK AND JILL

jack and Jill went down to the valley
To get a pail of water
When they were coming up 
They saw a ran into a bear
That took the dare

















Allen Hollandsworth
"4/28/11

Reviews

[Jacques]

i'm just being constructive here - it just seemed like a rip - off Jack and Jill went up the hill like i said in my previous review - there's not much to it and little detail and there's no drive to it like nothing is conveying the story behind it and so far i've been dissapointing if i have to be honest and also you missed the J for Jack at the first line also there's error - They saw a ran into a bear [ mistake ]