POISING MOMENTS

Squalls is calling your desires

Dribbles of rain is bringing your fires.

Beclouded sky playing with moon

Fraudulence cloud took various role as protean.

Your odors in, grievancing me like canine

The embers of lunar, though, is shine.

Cascade and its tumultous colourless water

appears as your adjunction at its layer.

But i'm searching at all this environment

Why are you all poising,me, at my moment

Reviews

[Great Aunt Astri]

This reads very well. I like the style with rhyming couplets. The 'english' is not quite right in places, but I guess that in India it would be correct. The English language has many variations! Loved the poem, short, precise conjuring up a lovely image.

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

Beautiful and quiet interesting.



I loved these stanza's lines.



Beclouded sky playing with moon

Fraudulence cloud took various role as protean.



Cascade and its tumultous colourless water

appears as your adjunction at its layer.

you might want to check some of the spelling
but other then that this is a great piece.

Thank you for sharing. blessings. kindred poet

[EmilyBianca]

Interesting. Your vocabulary in this is excellent! it really pulls it all together nicely.

[Penny]

Wonderful imagery. Biggest weapon of this poem and of poetry in general great write. Thanks for sharing

[Arabella Song]

I love your descriptions :) Very good! I did notice some grammar issues, though, and some of the word choice seems odd to me. For example, you've got subject-verb disagreement in the first stanza, I'm pretty sure "fraudulence" should be "fraudulent" since you're using it as an adjective. "Grievancing" isn't a word as far as I'm aware. Grievance is. And I think you mean either "poisoning" or "posing" in the last line :)

But, with the exception of grammar, fantastic! :D

[Vidya Bacchus]

Wonderful Poetry there Ssaad :)

[Ahena MK]

But i'm searching at all this environment....

really really good

[chitra dhara]

Beautifully composed....!Great thought...

[MsJewel]

Some great lines in this wonderful little gem. Watch the spelling errors - other than that - another wonderful poem my friend :) Julie

[kublakhan27]

Lots of interesting wordplay and juggling of images...I especially love the 'cascade' line...great work :)