POISING MOMENTS

POISING MOMENTS

A Poem by Saddam

Squalls is calling your desires
Dribbles of rain is bringing your fires.

Beclouded sky playing with moon
Fraudulence cloud took various role as protean.

Your odors in, grievancing me like canine
The embers of lunar, though, is shine.

Cascade and its tumultous colourless water
appears as your adjunction at its layer.

But i'm searching at all this environment
Why are you all poising,me, at my moment

© 2014 Saddam


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This reads very well. I like the style with rhyming couplets. The 'english' is not quite right in places, but I guess that in India it would be correct. The English language has many variations! Loved the poem, short, precise conjuring up a lovely image.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Why aren't we all out there...probing and trying to understand the understandable :) Made me think x

Posted 10 Years Ago


Wow, filled with meaning. I will be taking a while to fully examine and understand this poem
lissalovesyou:)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Short yet full of description and stern meaning, well done, good read.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Your work really grows, you're using words as your friends from another land and I so admire that! Love the phrase, 'Cascade and its tumultous colourless water ~ appears as your adjunction at its layer.' Bearing in mind you write in an unfamiliar language, you display your thoughts gently and as clearly as can be.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Wonderful write you put a lot into a rather small poem

Posted 10 Years Ago


lovely very good thanks for sure

Posted 10 Years Ago


Cascade and its tumultous colourless water..wow!,,You always amaze me with your great talents and vivid imagination..Great Share!!!:))
maria rose♥

Posted 10 Years Ago


"The embers of lunar, though, is shine.

Cascade and its tumultous colourless water"

Some good and powerful imagery in this poem. Bravio, sir...:)..............

Posted 10 Years Ago


Great poem Ssadd. Full of meaning. Keep penning your moods and thoughts.

Posted 10 Years Ago



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Saddam

RASRA, BALLIA, Uttar Pradesh, India



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