She and Her

She wakes up everyday

With a smile she says 'Good day'

 

 

She throws a joke here and there

She laughs loudly everywhere

 

 

And everyone see her joy

All her times, smile and enjoy

 

One Day

 

She woke up silent

The smile on her face was absent

 

Everyone asked whats the matter?

What did she say and answer?

 

What Happened?

Nothing happened.

 

She just took a break

From artificial smiles she'd fake

 

And is today,

just as

she is as.

Reviews

[reflectingus]

Wow, this is totally something I relate to. I'm so glad you wrote this poem on this topic, something I wish many people would understand. Most of the time, I'm not genuinely happy, and for that, I need something amazing to happen. It's not to be put as...say, hard to please, but it's just that the others may be hard to please, or you have too much going on. This poem definitely shows that dark side, however, this idea is so great, I just couldn't feel that intense effect I was supposed to feel. Feel free to wander a bit from a fixed rhyme structure, feel free to add more emotion, more powerful words, and maybe this poem can be a bit longer? Anyway, I loved this so much, that's why I want more of it haha. Keep writing. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I did like this poem. Hard always to show a fake face. Good to allow the real one to appear. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Hotwater]

Clever stuff... though we all need a mask.
*bird*

[Priscilla Sayers]

It is empowering to live life "as is". To me that means being yourself, all the time.

[Ellen Brook]

Amazing!!! The image makes the poem more vivid. :)

[hopelessromantic]

i like it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Insightful thinking here...amazing :D

[Nima M]

Wonderful, natty. This poem makes me feel so... heartfelt. I don't know if that makes sene, but I can totally understand. I love your ryhme scheme. Everything runs so smoothly.

[Raven Starhawk]

Poetic brilliance to every angle crafted. This was a splendid read.

[jennifer little]

wonderful job