She and Her

She and Her

A Poem by Sahar moonlight

She wakes up everyday

With a smile she says 'Good day'

 

 

She throws a joke here and there

She laughs loudly everywhere

 

 

And everyone see her joy

All her times, smile and enjoy

 

One Day

 

She woke up silent

The smile on her face was absent

 

Everyone asked whats the matter?

What did she say and answer?

 

What Happened?

Nothing happened.

 

She just took a break

From artificial smiles she'd fake

 

And is today,

just as

she is as.

© 2012 Sahar moonlight


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Wow, this is totally something I relate to. I'm so glad you wrote this poem on this topic, something I wish many people would understand. Most of the time, I'm not genuinely happy, and for that, I need something amazing to happen. It's not to be put as...say, hard to please, but it's just that the others may be hard to please, or you have too much going on. This poem definitely shows that dark side, however, this idea is so great, I just couldn't feel that intense effect I was supposed to feel. Feel free to wander a bit from a fixed rhyme structure, feel free to add more emotion, more powerful words, and maybe this poem can be a bit longer? Anyway, I loved this so much, that's why I want more of it haha. Keep writing. :)

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Very Strong.I loved the narration.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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She wears a mask. Beautiful.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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goes to show that everyone has a facade; she just chose to put hers down for a minute. shows honesty as well.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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this was very good, I think we can all relate to it haha(:

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Sahar moonlight
Sahar moonlight

France



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Hello everybody. Here is Sahar. I am from Lebanon living in France. I'm a mathematician but sometimes I find in myself the will to write something. I enjoy reading a lot and I was glad to join this.. more..

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