A Silent Spectator

A Silent Spectator

A Poem by PoeticVandal
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Two warriors fight as a silent spectator watches.. Who is he ?

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The arena is set,
So is the warrior pair,
Their swords in hand their shield is clenched,
On a sandy field their eyes like a hawk's,
Search their prey for a sign of weakness,
Around them await their numerous spectators,
I, one among them, share not their zeal,
I come not for the glory of battle,
My duty is simple, I lay in wait,
The fight begins, my sight is keen,
I care not for their reason,
For such things are beneath me,
I hear the clang of shields the slash of swords,
They lunge at each other like lions,
Hungry for victory, I can see it in their eyes,
It is shed, Oh crimson blood,
One has fallen, his defeat has come,
His breath is slow as life leaves him,
His hazy vision through tear filled eyes
Shows him nothing but me, his new companion,
His extended arm asks me for mercy,
My cold eyes tell him there is none to find,
For my name is Death.....
And I come for my prize.

© 2019 PoeticVandal


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I liked the way this poem unfolded, thinking this was a dual between two rivals fighhting as 'their' lover stands by and watches.... How wrong was I.....

You could turn this into a story... your diction was superb...

Cleverly penned.. :o)

Posted 8 Years Ago


PoeticVandal

8 Years Ago

Thank you
well written piece really keeps interest thanks

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is extremely well written. The outcome of war is death ‘the prize’ short and to the point and real to live. Well done. All the best…

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

wow! I could visualize them fighting, I felt as if I was sitting next to you. Brilliantly penned.

Posted 8 Years Ago


I adore it, your sense that death itself does not deal the fatal blow, but waits for us, humans, to desecrate each other, a most telling piece, well done. - I see red, Oh crimson blood I love this line, but for my own personal taste I would have said "I see fluid, I see liquid" or something to this effect as crimson and red are a repeat that doesnt feature in the txt, but as i said this is a personal preference, well done!

Posted 8 Years Ago


PoeticVandal

8 Years Ago

Thank you
Thomas Fitzgerald

8 Years Ago

your welcome

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Added on January 29, 2013
Last Updated on May 5, 2019
Tags: death, arena, last fight, final breath, destination, swords, shield, lifeblood, blood, defeat

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PoeticVandal
PoeticVandal

Dubai, Karama, United Arab Emirates



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I began writing almost 5 years ago, but not as much as i have in the past year or so.. Though I may have years behind me, I am but a hatch-ling in the world of writing...... That being said, please r.. more..

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