Stars Amongst the Sky

A weird mix of geekiness and sadness... How kinda random

I used to be so cold, 
Then there was something about you

Ignited a supernova in my heart,
The dying pain strewn like modern art,
Like a quasar explodes with beams of light,
Every twinkling star you gaze in the night,

Spinning around each other like we're binary stars,
Pulsar feelings extend to you like the contraries are, 
Brilliant trails of comets flying by me,
Intricate as the maze of spiral galaxies,

You warmed me inside like the suns radiant rays,
And I revolve around you throughout all my days,
Paint the blackness vibrant like a nebula's space,
Drawing me in uncontrollably like Sagittarius A,

It's rare along the folds of the universe,
An energy strong but sparking contraverse,
It's sad to see a young star die,
Burning out amongst the skies, 

But I must redshift to save the ember,
To a dimension as old as man can remember

Author's Note

Eh. Totally cringy and geeky and kinda makes me wanna throw up in my mouth a bit. Who am I? And when did I start writing poetry like this????

Reviews

[Jade]

I really enjoyed this write, Especially the summary part at the end.
So nicely expressed and written.
Way far from Geeky...SO GOOD more like it!!

[LazerRays]

Thank you! I'm totally a sucker for space things... I also am a sucker for a certain someone I love.... Thanks for dropping by! Your review is much appreciated!!! :D

[Jade]

not a problem, I myself love the milky way, space wise not the candy bar. 😊

[LazerRays]

Well hahaha i like the milky way too. And the candy bar is gross. I like grapes more than any sweet... (well mayve a nice homemade apple pie with a buttery crust...... Yum) curses! Now youve got me talking about food! XD

[Jade]

sorry, I like apple pie as well as apple crisp, darn it now I want ice cream...lol

[LazerRays]

Vanilla ice cream and apple pie is the bessssssstt! Mmmmm! Well, im off to my sisters for apple pie now- byeya! Hahahahahaha!

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the poem. Amazing use of description made the reader believe.
'You warmed me inside like the suns radiant rays,
And I revolve around you throughout all my days,
Paint the blackness vibrant like a nebula's space,
Drawing me in uncontrollably like Sagittarius A,"
The above lines. Perfect words to create safe place. Thank you Sarah for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[LazerRays]

thank you for reviewing!!!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Sarah.

[Nyx Star]

There's nothing cringy or geeky about this poem. I thought it was beautifully written. I've always been fascinated with stars. Nothing I didn't love about this. Nicely penned.

[LazerRays]

thanks you! that means a lot; although it is geeky :P and im totally fine with the geek part

[Nyx Star]

lol and why shouldn't you be proud and i still dont think it is :P

[light and ashes]

I have to say this is gorgeous and brilliant. You are absolutely brilliant. You let your imagination brush up against the universe and let yourself be known to it. I'm still cold inside, trying to keep the fire in my heart going and trying to let it warm me, but I have the feeling that we could both become quasars with time and patience and of course Jesus.

[LazerRays]

Thank you for that review! Yes yes, we all could become quasars at one point. Thank you again!!!! Much appreciated!!!

[light and ashes]

You're welcome Sarah, much love to you in Jesus

[Perdition]

Well I'll join ya in the cringe..but just a little. You have to go outside your range (not that this is) to keep that brain circuitry always guessing so this is a good thing...but I mean, Have you read Dharma Bums by Jack Kerouac or The Brothers Karamazov by Dostoevsky yet..I mean what are doing with your summers poet? ..lol. I still liked the "It's sad to see a young star die"...There are still things to look for in this and they show a promising direction...And now I have thrown up a little in my mouth as well..thanks...thanks for that.

[LazerRays]

yep. its making me cringe rn. soorrrrrrrrrrryyyyyyy!!!! hahahahahahaahahah- at least you threw up the poison!

[Perdition]

Well there is that!

[Maxwell Ryder]

"But I must redshift to save the ember"- what a great line...the best i've read on the site today. neat.

[LazerRays]

Thank you! That's flattering! You made my day!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I would have read this with a mixture of dumbness and ignorance if not for the 'quasar' reference you explained to me yourself once ;)
This is an emotionally well-built piece and def touches this reader as well as intrigues me. ..
For someone who thinks they're awkward letting out their emotions, you do a good job.
I enjoyed reading, of course. :D

[LazerRays]

I guess I gotta explain hahaha
supernova- giant explosion from a star
binary stars- two stars with connected gravitational force so they're stuck twirling around each other like magnets
pulsars- pulse energy really fast! Fastest pulse ever actually
Sagittarius A- our galaxys black hole
redshift- a term in a process that uses waves to see if an object is moving away or towards. Blueshift means coming towards, redshift means moving away.
Anything else you don't understand?

[DIVYA]

I like the celestial theme you have used here Sarah. Sad always that stars die as everything else in the universe. The burnout is inevitable when something burns so brightly. Salvaging what one can and moving on is the best one can do.

[LazerRays]

Yeah.... Sometimes burnouts are inevitable... All we can do is hope it doesn't turn to that. Thanks for reviewing! I appreciate it

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😁😁😁...it's not you...it's the poet living within yourself who writes what she feels and faces instead what other think...
Some very creative lines I enjoyed here dear Princess..Be blessed :)

[LazerRays]

Thank you so much! Oh yes, this is like that alien movie with a poet living inside me ready to burst out hahahaha! I appreciate your review so so much!

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Your Majesty!🙇