Magic Trick

Magic Trick

 

He makes me want him more and more

He’s never proved to be a bore

He forever knows my favorite spots

My neck, my stomach, the whole lot

He knows what turns me off and on

Regardless of all the heartaches he’s undergone

From his past relationships, he sure is strong

He’s perfect in my eyes, don't try to convince me that I'm wrong

The funny thing now is, he’s gone amiss

I’m left without a mere goodbye or a simple kiss

I turned my back to him to gaze at the stars

I turned back around and he’s vanished; I don't know whether he's near or far

I gasp, this I can’t bear

….Or was he ever really there?

 

Author's Note

I already know it's a bit off so please don't comment on that. Just tell me what you thought of it, please. And...Sorry, Andrew. It was SUPPOSED to be an erotic poem but I punked out, Lol. Better luck next time, right?

Reviews

[Greg Skura]

Great poem I truly enjoyed reading this! Nice little twist!

[Cassiopia Summers]

Exactly, Well done sis. (: This is a great poem beginning to end you had me hooked!!

[Andrew Wright]

This is more of a response than a bitten off piece. This is so good you might as well be able to call it an erotic work anyways and get on with it. I love it.

[Jack Inthebox]

Well done.

[Veronica]

I love it! :)

[al25]

A bit off what are you talking about. This is amazing. Its is one of my favourites on this website. I don't really know what to say everything about the poem is good. Very well written.

[Alex Thomas]

I like the rhyme scheme and rhythm. If he really liked you, he wouldn't have turned his back. It's painful to learn, but we all have to learn it. Heartache is one of the worst feelings out there. I like how the title is a bit elusive until you reach the end. Good job.

[Gianna Perry]

It tells a good story. I really like the rhyme scheme and rhythm to it. Another really good job!

~Shayna Reed

[Bridget Mcmaken]

I think that it's good. It's a nice poem.