Suckling Sleep

they could be peaceful

Excruciatingly intense
and powerfully piercing

was the wailing -

          the high pitched wailing -

that came from the cradle

that was on its side

in the next room.

But only I can hear the wailing now.

Everyone else hears
the infernal sobbing.

There's a ringing
in my head,
but the ringing
didn't replace

the wailing

like I wanted it to.

Now I hear the muffled screaming of discovery

and the muted explosion in front of me

and then the drowning THUMP-THUMP

of my heart

as the

ringing

and the wailing

stop.

But I hear the sobbing until the end.

Reviews

[Laura Maidah]

"the infernal sobbing." That's amazing.

"Now I hear the muffled screaming of discovery
and the muted explosion in front of me
and then the drowning THUMP-THUMP" is great.

Last line is solid. I love the alliteration in the first stanza. Great. No complaints.

[GunMetal]

Seriously intense. This was written with extreme skill. It's as disturbing as it is brilliant. Wow.

[w]

You flatter me sir

[R.A. Youngblood]

I like your structure, flow and imagery.
This is kinda painful and it's not easy to discover what it's all about.
I specially like the beginning, it's the most powerful to me.
Thanks for sharing..Keep it up :D

[w]

did you figure out what it is about?

[R.A. Youngblood]

It was difficult but i did (:

[Becky]

Brilliant. Just brilliant. The rhythm was flawless and the imagery was vivid. Wonderful write!

[LeeBabyRnR]

pure talent

[~LadyWolf~]

Not bad

[Corset]

wow, very powerful visuals and auditory manipulation, the babe, the chaos, the shock, the thump thump of panic. excellent.

[Dove]

Out of this entire poem I think the first stanza was the best, it was all good though. Another enjoyable read!

[Jordan A. Wilson]

The first stanza is the most gripping

[The Pain Stays Fresh]

Don't get me wrong. I love your work. But did you ever consider writing something that's NOT depressing??

[Satans Spawn]

Excellent write