I let it be

My human mortality from thy stroke

Imprisons the blood flowing through these veins of rouge

'Tis only by the thought of words

Tenderly spoken through thy mouth

I sense a thirst for the essence of wine

To drowse my senses

At last to sleep

 

Whilst the flames weaken

In the dusk of late hours

To the soft sheets of fair I am to fall

Amid wishes and fears within a fainting world

To which we so solemnly belong

 

O, but for a draft of thy scent

In this bitter room of vacant space and cold air

I shan't refuse the gift of thy presence

Even if for no more than a lone night

I would not have to withold

My yearnings

And sleep alone

 

However,

Thine eyes yield no affection

Towards the likes of me

And thus in dreaming you remain

Faultless to my needs and

For as long as I can keep you

Faultless in thine imperfection

I see thyself in me

 

It is enough, now

I let it be

Author's Note

Reviews

[Michelle N. H.]

Selmasitta, Shellstar, Sis.... this is so utterly beautiful, in the way you speak old English, and also in the rich meanings, and music, you convey your meaning here.... we are so mystical, mysterious, and fuzzy at times, our hearts speak, rather before we think, and it's highly sensitive, the way we express our art.... I feel so much in this one, it blows me away, of strength, and sadness the same time, (so beautiful your art is)... tears... to accept, as you do on your ending lines, sigh.... it's to love, to let go, once again, to love, to be one, even on distance, and to move further with the richness, once learned, from each other... there is an illusive beauty in this one, that's hauntingly brilliant ...

I so enjoyed it, and shall favorite it, to come back again and again, when my mood-quill, shall touch the past of yours, (here) and then I will let you know, so we can analyze more... my so talented Sis...
Thank you for being so unique, and raw.... :)

- Elisa

[Michelle N. H.]

Aww, Lisitta, your words touch me in a way only yours can, for I feel your sincerity and love from a distance. Thank you so much, for what you grant. You are a gift, as true friends are xxxx

And yours did mine... there is no writer like you dear one. :) It brings me always to "our home". You are the best, take good care today, and enjoy every bit of it. :) True friends, and family! you are far, but near... always xxxxx

[Michelle N. H.]

Nor is there anyone like you. Your writes are timeles ^^ Enjoy your day also, get well! xx

Thank you lovely. I will.... :) hope today this new day, you have a great one! -x- :)

[NeiL ArandA]

Perhaps the piece is about unrequited or unreciprocated love . I like the archaic style of tone .

[Scott Metro]

I love the old world sense to the verbiage and phrasing...this is a superior write Michelle.
The message is as old as mankind...tugging at us..causing confusion as to why it cannot just be so simple.
If only all our loves could be cherished by the two and not dimmed by the lonely (one).
I am really impressed by this.
Scott :).........

[Michelle N. H.]

The heart works in mysterious ways. Thank you for reviewing, Scott :)

[Scott Metro]

If you keep writing like this...you will be the 1 in a million..we will read about you.
....and you're welcome little ember.

[Michelle N. H.]

Hm, I strongly doubt that.. In another dimension perhaps, hah, but definitely not in this one. It's really nice of you to think so though.

[Scott Metro]

Remember I told you that...someday you'll look back and say..."Damn...he was right"
S

[R. L. Hill]

"O, but for a draft of thy scent
In this bitter room of vacant space and cold air
I shan't refuse the gift of thy presence
Even if for no more than a lone night
I would not have to withold
My yearnings
And sleep alone"

This is my favorite stanza. The worlds are very powerful to me. I love your use of older language as well. You have taken hold of a level of language that is hard for many to grasp. I salute you.

[Michelle N. H.]

Aw, thank you. It means a lot to me, I take it all in.

[Matt DeFranco]

Wow! Michelle this is so vivid. I can really associate this...

[Michelle N. H.]

That makes me glad. Thank you, Matt!

[Vidya Bacchus]

your poetry gets better with your every attempt I am in awe of this one i think it is simply gorgeous.

[Michelle N. H.]

That's such a lovely thing to say.. Thanks a lot, Vidya.

[Vidya Bacchus]

you are very welcome

[Coyote Poetry]

"And thus in dreaming you remain
Faultless to my needs and
For as long as I can keep you
Faultless in thine imperfection
I see thyself in me"
I like the above lines a lot. I like the flow of thoughts leading to the strong ending. Sometime we must accept things with a calm heart. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Michelle N. H.]

You're ever so right. Thank you kindly :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Alice Aries]

This is really beautiful. Powerful and evocative, you clearly have a firm mastery of language and how to apply it. One criticism I would make is that this piece feels perhaps a little like you are trying to write archaically, e.g. use of thy, thine, etc. I myself explore this but I feel at times this stifled some of your beautiful metaphors; upsets the flow somehow. That said, this piece is simply majestic. Hats off.

[Michelle N. H.]

Finishing this poem was a challenge I sat up for myself. I was eager to attempt writing archaically since I hadn't tried it before. I adore your poetry and cherish your praise of mine greatly as I too appreciate the critique :)