Serpent inside the room

a starter poem as not done any for many a year

Serpent inside the room

 

Oh what an evil web we weave

The intention is always flatter to deceive

Tangled mind and vicious tongue

With a trail so slimy and the trap is sprung

 

I’ll soothe your body and also your mind

Then you’ll sell out your soul over time you’ll find

I’ll devalue your world, every memory so stained

You’ll lose all you’ll morals your brain will be trained

 

I’ll give something so valuable that will inspire all your love

It will increase my control that will now wrap round you like a glove

It will give you eternal happiness, oh ill laugh at your joy

Because it will increase your rage, that will be my toy

 

An entrapment of pleasure a world of lust and sin

Because I’m the only one you can trust, I say with a grin

Oh you’re entrapped in my web as tight as a womb

I’ll eat your from within, I’m the serpent inside the room  

 

  

Author's Note

this is the first I have done in many years as time has not allowed me to do, however, all criticisms and comments are welcome

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Very good use of words. Realistic places and thoughts you took the reader.
"Oh you’re entrapped in my web as tight as a womb
I’ll eat your from within, I’m the serpent inside the room "
The above lines are solid. You did well with first poem in many years. I look forward to reading more. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Sherlock1]

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment, I really appreciate it. I was a little worried as it has been so long so thank you for the encouragement

[Coyote Poetry]

You did well. Create place, wild vision and you told good tale. And you are welcome.

[barleygirl]

This is a damn fine creation, for having just dusted off the cobwebs from your poetic penchants. I just reviewed the companion write, the author directing me to your reply here, so I'm enjoying this vicarious glimpse into your spat. Your evil spirit shines with seductive tenderness (altho I do realize some of MAY be tongue-in-cheek)! I can see why you reduced her to the rant, if this is the way you conduct yourself! *heh! heh! heh!* . . . Thanks for sharing openly, these are the true-life interactions that make writing really come alive.

[hcarson]

loving this, hope to see more soon!

[Inject Positivity]

This poem don't look like a starter, the thoughts and word choices are very good... It has been very well presented too... I really liked the concept... Overall a very good start... Will keep an eye on your page for new works.... Full ratings...