Loneliness

           When I miss you, my day is like the fog that doesn’t clear;

          The sun shines on my face but I feel nothing but fear;

       There is no light to be followed in the dark;

           You have warned me from the start,

           that you are nowhere to be found,

          When the hurt breaks through your heart.

         My loneliness maybe a room with no exits,

          But my soul will follow you, no matter what.

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

i think your opening line is strong .. the imaging sparks my imagination and i relate to it. .. that kind of fogginess when i want to wake up but just can't shake the sleep off .. loneliness can be so painful .. life seems to take us there until we learn that we are ok within our own selves .. that being alone and loneliness are not the same .. in my life that lesson learned takes the edge off "loneliness" .. i miss people .. but i'm still ok ;)
E.

[Silmara McGarry]

You are so right!
Is the same with me.
Many thanks indeed dear for your thoughtful review 😊

[Pete]

"My loneliness maybe a room with no exits". Fantastic line and great metaphor.

[Silmara McGarry]

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing, Pete! I am happy indeed that you liked :-)

[Miss Sharon]

WOW AND DOUBLE WOW! What an awesome and irresistible write this is. You have touched me deeply my dear friend. ~Sharon

[Silmara McGarry]

Thanks a million my darling for reading it and reviewing wonderfully.
See you dear friend ;-)

[TheLostMind]

"If you feel lonely.. Look towards the sky...
You will feel my presence.. You will know that I am near..
It's a cruel world...Time will fly by...
Yet, I will always wait for you.. forever..." :)

This one is a really good write. I loved the last line. Great job :)

[Silmara McGarry]

So Beautiful :-) !!!!
I am indeed glad you liked. Thanks a million! ;-)

[Neville]

Ah' what it is to be the first. Loneliness, is indeed a most unpleasant place, & one which you have more than adequately portrayed here. Let's all steer clear of it if at all possible eh..........N

[Silmara McGarry]

Yes and Absolutely! Thanks so much N, for reading it and taking the time to review it. Sil

[Neville]

My pleasure, as always. Now lets try & get a few folk reading you......N

[Silmara McGarry]

Yesss!!! ;-) Thanks a million for the support.

[Neville]

No problem.........