Vivid Memories Walk Over My Mind.

A mother and a child with a violent past... as they try to start over by moving house.

And as we are going...

I can see it in your eyes, its hard to take.

You're stricken, cold and in pain.

But can still see through the stains that we've left here, you're strong.

Our windows shutout memories, and our doors pros-phone interruptions.

Our curtains alienate daylight and our milkshakes makers?.. diminish eruptions.

As we go...

I encourage you that what we are doing is right!

"There is no future in us being here, no true meaning, nor delight."

You stand infront of me, cold and rigid. I guess you didn't think it would have come so soon.

"Darling? The day is here, we need to make a move."

The walls have ears and the carpet sneers.

Our once shiny TV, now dumped in the street for everyone to see. 

It was once ours; this house. It once was 'ours'. 

We go...

Walked through the bedroom and down the stairs... then see how the cupboards glare as they ask: 'Why are we bare?'

Pictures that were once on hooks, are slammed into books.

Draws which were once stocked, are bare and now locked.

Gone...

"It was the best we could do."

We'll find somewhere new, where bad memories don't hang around, if anything... they'll find common ground.

Reviews

[Monica]

Well done! I like this...it is a sad walk through of their lives. We know how it was, how the mother is attempting to console and ease the child through the difficulty of leaving, and finally how the mother describes moving toward a better place.
..."they'll find common ground"...I truly believe that everyone, eventually, finds where they belong.

"And as we are going...
I can see it in your eyes, its hard to take.
You're stricken, cold and in pain.
But can still see through the stains that we've left here, you're strong."

...The imagery you created here, the childs eye...very well done! What a perfect way to start such a poem!! Keep writing!!

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful poem with a scary story inside the words. Violence is hard to fight against. Sometime escape is the only way. I like the flow of thoughts and the strong ending. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Wild Willow Blue]

Superb. A hauntingly lovely read. Pictures were playing in my mind like a movie, as I was reading every line. I just loved this piece. Beautiful job.

[Virtuosa X]

Greatly done. I love the feeling these words brought to me. The bitterness and sweetness of living and starting a new life all over. Love it. Keep up the good work.
Phedorah

[Liderien]

I like this one a lot. Same thing, you could edit it a little, but its a good strong poem. I like the structure, very unique and its makes the statements ring loud drawing attention to it. Very nice

[Susanna F]

Strong emotions here, and an interesting format. Pulled me in. Beautifully done.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Survival often means making sacrifices, sometimes you must take one step back before proceeding two steps forward. I love the format, it adds to the power of the wording.

[Ahmed Tokyo]

Nice description for every part , It's great overall ;)

[Cosmic Dreamer]

It's absolutely brilliant, well done. My favourite stanza is 'we go...', especially when the cupboards are asking why they are bare. So beautifully written, with a strong message behind it.