Life or Death???

Life or death?

Keep the change!

I’m living ‘till death.

I’m loving past death!

I love you so much it’ll be my death!

And I don’t mind...

I’m whispering it from near and

Screaming it from far with my very last breath.

Must I suggest that we reflect on not what we lost,

But on what we have left.

Okay, we’re over that topic,

So let’s mark it with a check.

Would you still love me even if I didn’t bring in any checks for us to have fun with?

We’re living life in bliss and you’re a hot chick with nice breasts,

And the thought of you naked has me erect!

I’m sorry doll,

But sometimes I can be a hot mess!

I can be a wreck and I’m so stressed,

But I’m alive and that makes me blessed.

I’m not the best,

But I’ll always give you the best of me,

The honest me,

And the humble me.

Does that make me the best?

No it doesn’t,

It just makes me.

I won’t change because I’ll always be direct.

I love too much,

So f**k lust when it comes between us.

I’m an open minded person with an open heart in my chest.

Trust me!

Why do you think it was so easy for us to connect?

Reviews

[Rusteangi Ruba]

YOUR POEM IS SO TOUCHING..
POEM DEEPLY SPEAKS ABOUT THE LOVE IN A RELATIONSHIP.
I like your anger on me, shout over me, scream at me, and calling back to you after that.

I cant say it is short temper, but it is the feeling one with another, "you are just for me". No body is so strong, and it is not weakness I know, but a need.
THIS MAKES A REAL SENSE.
YOU MADE YOUR QUESTIONS VERY POETIC IN THE SENSE.
WELL DONE DEAR
RJ

[sinNsincerity]

Deep as a bottomless well . . .

[Insight "MH"]

I’m not the best,
But I’ll always give you the best of me,

This by far one of the best parts that I have read on this site, it is a guarantee of the honest feelings and true intentions for someone you love. All in all, the poem is nicely crafted, well done!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much, I am so glad that you enjoyed it!

[Cara]

wow, this one goes to my favorites list, amazing writing, thank you for sharing

[sinNsincerity]

That's great to hear, thank you Cara.

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

One of your wittiest and rawest poems yet! An absolute favorite for me. Every line is just so sharp.

Like:
"I’m living ‘till death.
I’m loving past death!
I love you so much it’ll be my death!"
That is very passionate of you. To love so much, it could kill you, yet keep loving even after death.

Like:
"I’m an open minded person with an open heart in my chest.
Trust me!
Why do you think it was so easy for us to connect?"
I think every sensible woman dreams of that. A man who wears his heart on his sleeve, not afraid to feel and to love. To be connected. Some men are unfortunately afraid of that, claiming it as a sign of weakness. It is absolutely not! I am happy that you chose to think and feel that way.

[sinNsincerity]

That mad my day Nadia, it really did!
I do my best...and it's sad that they see it as a weakness. I use to be afraid and no matter the pain it brings, it's all worth it!
Thank you so much =D

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

it is my dear friend!!! true ones will appreciate and value that quality in you!

[sinNsincerity]

I would only hope so...

[Coyote Poetry]

A lot of thoughts and topics in the poem. Life is hard. We release and hold on to things we may need and want. I like the feel of conversation and internal answer. I like the poetry that end with a question. This poem did. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[child of God]

This is I think one of my favorite of your work sin I see that it comes straight from your heart I love how it is in first person making the reader wonder who it is about allowing them to but there own perspective on it thank you for sharing ☺

[sinNsincerity]

I'm happy to hear that! thank you so much!

[A. Fiorillo]

amazing....hot mess! Lol. I only thought us women could be hot messes. Heeeheee. Nice work. I love it. Your so honest and authentic in your writing. I hope she knows how you feel. :) ;)

[sinNsincerity]

I also can be at times lol
Thank you so much!

[yvo miki]

this is an emotional poem and is cute !

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you!

[Emily]

I like the story it tells!
Well done!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Emily!

[dan]

This one is presented as if it comes straight from the heart with no discernible filter cushioning the words prior to impact. Straight, direct and to the point, unvarnished. It's like the reader is hearing one half of a two way conversation; it is then up to the reader to fill in the other half, ALWAYS nice to get the reader involved in such a way. Splendid write. take care...dan

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for your review Dan.
All my works come from my heart.

[sereenaoutloud]

HI Bestie...LOVE this one... you pour out your mind in this and you can feel it..really feel it...like.you were speaking to the reader from across the table!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Sereena, I love that!
I had a writing teacher not too long ago who would always tell me to find my voice.
I have a few if you know what I mean lol =D
But that's what I'm always trying to do when I write.
To write and always keep in mind of the reader.
That's what makes this so fun, how much am I willing to revile about myself without lying, while knowing people are going to read it...

[sereenaoutloud]

Different voices ..yes i think we all have a few and this voice is very much heard and felt in this write!
Really is superb SweetSin! :)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you bestie!