Hold Your Ticket

Everything is very unique…

Quote my behavior.

Factual relationships,

Not living in the past,

So I can live in the now.

Sorry about that,

But I had to dig back,

To let you know that the first will be last…

I’m coming into my own,

But I do know…

That I do not own my soul.

Am I saved by my works or by my faith?

I said sorry once,

So let’s turn the page...

I’m taking back Sunday

And saying f**k you to three days of grace

Because there are days when I don’t want to obey.

I’m a living, walking, talking contradiction;

More like Yin-Yang.

I guess I have to say it again,

And again,

I’m SORRY God,

But I don’t want to be the same.

Being perfect by just knowing I am flesh,

And I’m always knowing love can be refreshed.

Taking care,

But most times I’m caring towards temptation.

Don’t try to understand the essence of what is being said,

Just accept it.

Not one can be inducted into the hall of fame of the holy gates

And that’s okay because I’m satisfied with this Earthly place.

Don’t waste your time because we are all flawed.

I love being the crack in the wall.

Acknowledge the choreographer.

A love gift.

To go away with this is more than a message…

Hold your ticket!

Reviews

[steven sundell]

I love reading passion that bleeds from thoughts, obviously written, as most true art, be it in lyric form, stage playwright, book, chapters, or verse, without need of anything contrived. That which WILL remain within or without are the 3 following stanzas,

Don’t waste your time because we are all flawed.
I love being the crack in the wall.
Acknowledge the choreographer!

Great effort!!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for reading, I really appreciate it!

[Tashida]

This was a very interesting read... I liked the flow of your words and the message conveyed. Yes this is true we are all flawed (God knows I have mine's) but we should not be satisfied with our flaws. We should try to be better... to rise up above our flaws. As my parents have always said "Perfect practice makes perfect". I used to think that was a contradictory statement. How can your practice be perfect if you have not yet achieved perfection? I hope I said that right. Sorry I'm rambling now... Anyway, I enjoyed it... as usual!!

[Ana B.]

wow. Simply incredible! The workings of your mind never cease to humble dear David. This is definitely a favorite.
''Everything is very unique…
Quote my behavior.
Factual relationships,
Not living in the past,
So I can live in the now.''

freaking awesome.

Your fan, Ana.

[Einstein Noodle]

:) ......... well said ..street real! .. totally relate ... this:
"I’m taking back Sunday" is the best turn i have read this morning ...i am a Christian tho you may not be... the themes in your poem are very Judeo Christian .. hypocrisy is our bain .. no doubt about it .. we put on our gloss because once saved we are supposed to be "new" .. and tho it may be partly true ..there are many thorns in the flesh (St. Paul) that will remain .. the hard truth being we are not perfect and we do need to stand in forgiveness always ... and then in humility .. love this poem .. love the turn!
E.

[Sinbulvinter]

This is beautiful and speaks so many volumes of emotions. Very well written.

[Tabby Mac]

I like this as it is real. Reality in true form. For me I like how it strikes back at the so called Truth followers I've seen in my life that hold judgement and works over grace and faith. This notion of theirs can be decieving and give truth a false perception.
True freedom is not in perfection but in brokenness. The tone in society is that if you do x, y, z then you win always taking it back to traditions. When I believe it's where your heart lies. Truth leads with love.
I'm not sure this is what you mean but I liked the idea of holding your ticket...my hope is that I am one of the last and that the ones I see struggling in life find freedom. Let them go first.
But even tho I read this a few times I wasn't sure exactly what you were saying. I am only spitting out the thoughts that your piece stirred up. Passionate for sure! To me it magnified the confusion out there for people concerning faith and works.
Be you! We all have to find the truth for ourselves. It's not what others say, opinions and distortions are rampant.
Tabby

[Mr.Writer]

Wow... this is very well done!! :)
The message is very clear and the worlds and rhymes go really well together!
Keep it up!

[richieb]

Who holds the keys to the materials of the earth, who holds the keys to the rewards of heaven? Who will punch your ticket?
I understand the essence of your write. Just remember to trust the Wisdom of the Father
Blessings,
Richie b.

[Perkele.7885]

'And that’s okay because I’m satisfied with this Earthly place.'
This line sincerely bothers me! Not so much as it applies to me but, the implications that it has for you.
'I’m SORRY God,'
The above line is important! Even if you do not see it now! You are flawed as we all are! Saying sorry to God is a good thing. It establishes a connection!
Sin, I ask you not to burn your bridges with God...Hold Your Ticket to Salvation!

[sinNsincerity]

I'm indeed willingly holding my ticket.
Thank you for reading Sir.
Always a pleasure!

[Ruth]

Ohh...yes! Would love to hear this as spoken word...a slice of life...in human tones :)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you hon! I'm happy that you think so!