Cut

About how one feels when cutting her/his wrist to handle the pain and suffering.

It's been so long

That I looked into my soul

It might take as much time

To fill the bleeding holes

It's so painful

Yet, it feels numb

Peaceful to me

Painful to some

The beautiful beads of red

Drop by drop,fall down

Carrying my sorrow away

Kissing the dead ground

The wound of flesh will heal

But who'll mend the wounds of my heart

It may be the last time

Or it may be the start

It's just an outlet

Don't think it's fun

It's peaceful to me

But painful to some...

Author's Note

A new topic again.I re-read it to check any spelling errors.I hope there are not any more of them.
Well...that's it!!

Reviews

[maiarusm]

I'm really not sure how I'd review this without allowing subjectivity since I've always hated the thought of cutting (that and suicide, especially with having a friend go through such experiences). Anyway, generally... the flow is nice. I found no spelling errors (this is a response to your AN). And your words were creatively descriptive. It is nicely done.

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I liked it
It was very personal for me, wording was well throughout
I also agree, let your heart be your guide in anything you do
look forward to reading more

[Melaniespace]

good one. sounds all too familar.

[Kitty]

A brilliantly written poem. I used to cut myself so I can tell you from experience that what you have written about is the truth. It might have been the end of my life, but it ended up being the beginning of a bad habit which gave me a relief for a while.

Your word choice is brilliant!!! I really enjoyed reading this!!

Well done!!!

Josie

[Sam Freeland]

The form of your poem was both perfect and personal for me. Both peaceful for me
and painful to critics who only think that what they do is better. Critics were the worst
teachers that I knew in forty years of teaching...don't listen to them...your heart
is your best guide. What you write should only be changed when you believe you
could say it better.

[alternative_be]

Wouldn't it be useful to divide this poem into stanzas?
For instance you could use
"It's so painful
Yet, it feels numb
Peaceful to me
Painful to some"
and
"It's just an outlet
Don't think it's fun
It's peaceful to me
But painful to some..."

as refrains and leave a line open, to make those parts stand out from the other stanzas.
In this way, the middle would stand alone, which would make it a sort of featured part, so it comes out stronger in the end.

[CDoh]

mmmmm.... interesting poem although you lost me, you had a great rhyme pattern in the beggining and just steared away from it through the middle. in the end you reintroduced me to that same pattern and finished strong. there are 2 ways of spotting this

1- you wrote this lapse in the middle to hopefully punch through and finish strong
which was achieved

2- all the same you still lost me. keep it strong through the middle, you know what u want to write now u just need to strengthen your weaknesses. write and re-write. just STRENGTHEN, its the hardest part in my opinion but at the ame time draws people to a deeper connection with your work