I want this and that

 

I want the bling, the cars, and  the cribs

An island to my name and

The cars that still haven’t came

 

I want all the money in the world

The people to know my name

 

People this days

All they care about is what I want

Not what’s good for us

All they know is the money

But we can’t live with money

 

We need love and faith

No haters, no failures

We need to succeed 

But the car keys and jet skis

Aren’t going to get us there

 

We must be smart

We must be patient

Don’t take those hundred dollars

When later it might be trillions

 

Wait for your time and be patient

Wait for the money and the success come to you

Don’t be blinded and waste it all on things you don’t need.

Reviews

[Ees]

"People this days"- I think you mean "these"
"All they care about is what I want"- you mean what THEY want. you care about what you want, they care about what they want.

Nice poem, a few typos. The grammar isn't quite right in the last line of the first stanza, but I LOVE it that way. don't let anybody convince you to change that. This a cool morality poem. I don't think there is any money coming, it's all used up, it's all gone from my perspective, but I was raised in a family that had plenty of money, boats, cars, houses and motorcycles, that became a family with barely anything at all. By the time I came of age I lived in a two bedroom house, my parents drove really s****y cars and there were no more hundred dollar bills anymore. I still carry my name though, I am still a bit of a local celebrity and so some that is just as important, some people just want to be known and acknowledged and that is just as silly, I wrote about that, sort of in my most recent poem: "stars".

[Sunny Skye]

Oh wow, but thank you for reading and i will check the typos, my family has always been middle class and sometimes we had our downs but we are good now. We always saved as much as we can and didn't waste our money on things we didn't need

[Ees]

That's very smart. Sometimes when you make a ridiculous amount of money you just don't think that it is going to come to an end. haha. I am glad they spent all that money on things that we didn't need though, I got to experience a lot more than some of my friends.

cool poem, yeah, once those typos are fixed- perfect.

[J. Viands]

So true so true dreamin bout “stuff” and chasing it mercilessly is worthless when I was seventeen or so I found myself back in the rougher parts of the city and a friend of mine always talked about getting this jeep that he loved instead of getting the f**k out and actually doin something for himself anyway he got it and then it got stolen great work as always that tidbit was just what the piece made me think of

[Sunny Skye]

Oh wow

[Coyote Poetry]

There is logic in your words. Money can't make you happy. Good friends and family can. I tell the young people. Travel and have fun when you are young. You have 50 plus years of hard work a-coming. Don't jump in too quickly. I like the complete poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Sunny Skye]

Thank you, is always a pleasure reading your reviews

[quarintine_deathangel]

Ican see where you're coming from in this. Very nice. Thankyou for writing and requesting ^.

[Sunny Skye]

Thank you for reading

[James William Dyer]

I like your poem, but for every word like "smart" or "patient" there is a more specific, expressive word. Substituting these general words with synonyms that carry more weight, more, meaning, more !umPH! will really increase your poetics.

[Sunny Skye]

Thank you and i will also look for those words and make them stronger

[Ahmad Cox]

Such a true and powerful statement in these days and ages. You truly are a sage of your age.

[Sunny Skye]

Thank you

[Steven Cash]

Nice :)

[Sunny Skye]

Thank you

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The biggest thing wit people is greed, yerp, we all have it sadly ¬_¬ but hey! It's natural to want. *eyes a big bucket of ice cream on the counter* Mhmmm yeah....humans...can...stop being greedy but- *runs off to grab spoon and digs into ice cream* *takes a huge scoop* *swallows and then continues* BUT ITS REALLY HARD TO STOP! Especially if its chocolate, vanilla, and strawberry flavored. :P Great poem!

[Sunny Skye]

lol yep