A Letter..

The thoughts I couldn't ignore.

 

Let’s just not think anymore.

I don’t want to think anymore.

It’s not like any of it was real…

Or, at least, that’s what I’d like to say.

I honestly don’t know.

Was any of it real?

Or were they words poised on lips

Heavy with your breath that I wanted to hear?

 

I wish I couldn’t think of you anymore.

They’re warm memories..

But they fill me with such loneliness

I can’t bear it.

They make me wish I could see you again

Only for a fleeting moment.

I know I promised to let people in…

And though I do think of you as at least a friend…

I can’t trust myself.

 

I can’t trust myself to be strong around you.

I can’t trust myself not to break,

To give in like I really want to.

I can’t trust myself

Because I know

That it won’t be long

Until I reach that point

Where I know my heart can break.

 

We don’t deserve each other.

 

I’m sorry…

Author's Note

I didn't know what to call this. And I really don't know what to say. Tell me what you think, if it depressed you or reminded you of something or...yeah, you get the point.

Reviews

[*** Hey Jude***]

Yes, it seems you definitely deserve each other! ~ :-)

[Katie Foutz Voss]

Even in your expression of words there is a lack of confidence--the same lack of confidence seen in the speaker of the poem. I think that is the true tragedy of the piece. (Not that is was a tragedy. It was good. But it was tragic. I think I'm making sense.) There is a feeling that wants to get out and it is being shown simply by the fact that it can't be expressed. There is such confusion here, I can see the speaker holding their head and not finding the right words. And still, they are the right words. Some of my favorite writers, readers and word-lovers have told me this: Write *with* feeling, not *about* feeling. You do this beautifully. Thank you for sharing. :)

[Jackal]

The expression here was colorful, vivid... I'm not sure what way to express it but it felt as though i was spectating while you were spilling you emotions to this person and I could feel the emotion overflowing from your words. I like it a lot

[Broken Warrior]

As I'm new to your method of expression, I went through this piece carefully...From the first line, to the first stanza, your position was abruptly presented, kept the flow consistent while maintaining interest. Good piece, one of which I believe life wrote for you through heart felt experiences. Great write, though i must say I'm sorry you had the material to write it. Life can toss some seemingly insurmountable trials, fact is, trials must end, this is how beautiful pieces like this can begin. Great write :)

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

Wow this is good...i love it!
Great Job

[Jerry Ables]

Such an excellent piece and I just know that many people can relate to the emotions you've expressed here. Genuinely appreciated. Peace & safety to you & yours!

[Zoey89]

I loved the opening line "Let's just not think anymore" . It was a great way to subtly express how frustrated the narrator is with the situation that they are in. Even though the poem is rather sad, I think it has an interesting ending. Because the narrator is strong enough to realize that they aren't good for eachother and that it's time to move on. Great poem

[deeps]

Such a sad write here and very emotional
I have felt this way before, i know od the feeling.
Very well expressed.

[ABitBrokenPoetry]

well it is a very sad poem. but i liked it. i think we all can relate. there are times in every1's life, when we realize we have to let someone or something go because they aren't good for us, even tho we don't want to & it hurts. i have been there many times, with many people. i think its a heart-felt & deeply sad but well spoken write.

[Dominic Rosales]

This poem is depressing to me because, in the seventh grade i fell in love with one of my friends neighbors,well we both had feelings for each other and as every one knows as one thing leads to the next, we had sex, well that was turning point in my life, that is when I lost something (do i need to say what), and for obvious reasons for being a guy i wanted more, but i didnt want to beg for it, so I couldnt even look at her without picturing her naked, so I said we needed to take a break in our relationship, now go ahead and call mme queer for feeling bad cause i wanna have sex with an attractive class mate, but I loved her and it changed when sex came into play, so this poem reminds me of her and it depresses me because I had to let go of her for reasons that some people dont even know. Well that was in Nh and I live in Texas now. and to this day, every attractive person I look at, I think of her, and sex. thanks for hearing me out