Surrender

A Villanelle

Summer’s pastel beauties

Quiver with apprehension

Yielding to her cloak of fire

 

Facing the inescapable scorch

Drooping, bending, swaying

Summer’s pastel beauties

 

Tints of patchwork bliss   

Suffocate in earthy hues

Yielding to her cloak of fire

 

The unbridled merciful swoosh  

Signals their timely demise

Summer’s pastel beauties

 

A season topples on cue

Crumbling weedy and lifeless

Yielding to her cloak of fire

 

Leaving resplendent hillsides  

Purple, yellow, orange, and red

Summer’s pastel beauties

Yielding to her cloak of fire

Reviews

[C.T. Bailey]

Splendid! A beautiful poetic expression of Fall...in a Villanelle. Probably one of the most beautiful poems of Autumn I have ever read. Your first two lines set a mood that is carried throughout the entire piece. I like that thought of summer quivering with apprehension...it days are numbered. Wow. Very well done....I tip my hat to you.
Todd

[Creepy Swine Guy]

This feels like it's about the transition from spring to summer. It feels hot ...sweltering and oppressive. I wilt with the patchwork.

Your words are stiflingly descriptive.

[cyanskye]

Beautiful job St.Violet. Your imagery is gorgeous.

[HoorayForUnderdog]

That was beautiful! You never disappoint!

[C.L. Wilson]

I live in a mostly ever-green woods area. Not very many trees that turn into the traditional colors and most of them turn brown and that its. You make me almost envy you.

[J. James Reider]

Damn D.L. beat me to reviewing first! How did he get here 7 minutes after it was posted? lol

Another well crafted Villanelle! You make this form look so easy and I am a bit jealous. The only thing I can see wrong is that you swayed a bit from the "a" scheme. i.e. pastel beauties should rhyme with cloak of fire. But that's only necessary if we're going to be "stuffy" and I know how much you like stuffy... lol..

I love the word "resplendant"... I don't know why, maybe because it snaps off the tongue. Your imagery is leaping out of the screen, and it surprises me not that the first color you listed was purple (: Wonderfully done!

[Dempsey Wilson (D.L. Wi..]

Very nicely done! What a beautiful way to write of summer turning to fall (Yielding to her cloak of fire.) Quite an impressive poem, St. Violet!