Susie's Balloon

Susie's Balloon

A Poem by Time.

Ever so blue,

up in the sky,

it flys so high.

 

Up up and away,

fly fly high in the sky,

Let them wonder why,

 

Out of sight into the night,

without fright Wish it,

an oh so safe flight.

© 2011 Time.


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Nice write, a child perhaps losing a balloon... watching as it flees having no way to get it back.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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I think it's really good, consider using some sort of structure and experiment, think about the way a balloon moves and make your poem move like it. Hope it helps.

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