On the Edge of a Suncast Sea

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

On the Edge of a Suncast Sea
By: Adam M. Snow

 

My lady, awake thee heavenly beams,
and lay thee rest upon my dreams.
Let it be known thy once tearful sorrow,
and let it be known our demise the hour.

 

"Away will I take thee." says I
"Away I take thee and never die."

 

My lady, time cease as your tear drop falls;
the grass of green, now is blackened by thee tears.
Lay your head upon my breast,
close your eyes and forever rest.
Let it be known as thee shed emotions,
you're never alone when you cry dry tears.

 

My lady, forever I mourn of thee,
standing here on edge of suncast sea.

 

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Reviews

[SilentDreamer]

First off-I adore that picture. I love the feel of this poem and a few of the lines really stood out for me. I think my favorites were the bit about the grass which just seems so vivid and descriptive, and the last two lines which tie in so well with the picture. All in all a great peice.

[Adam M. Snow]

Thank you

[Jazique]

Its not even the picture that grasps all the beauty but, the words just as wll, excellent job it was just so lovely and descriptive. You truly paint the most wonderful things with the only tool words. Magnifico!

[Adam M. Snow]

Thank you

[afra]

simply beautiful ...well done

[Adam M. Snow]

Thank you

[Marie]

Sweet and old-fasioned...and of course, the picture is lovely.

[Adam M. Snow]

Thank you

[Wolfhilde]

A beautiful picture! and a beautiful poem. it perfectly fits together. well done :)

[Adam M. Snow]

Thank you

[Jetta Zippora]

So beautiful. I drifted away for a moment as I read it...far from my reality and doubts. Your poetry always carries me to a place of peace and reflection that I just love and can't get enough of. Brilliant write, friend.

[Adam M. Snow]

Why thank you

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is beautiful. I enjoyed reading the description of location and my lady and the flow of thoughts. The ending made this amazing poem perfect. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Bridget Murphy]

I loved this poem as well! It's so sad, it almost reminds me of the poem, The Lady of Shalott! My favorite lines are "Away will I take thee." says I
"Away I take thee and never die." thank you for sharing!!
~BM

[Renée]

Your writing like this one make me crave to sit under a tree and savor these..

[kublakhan27]

I can certainly read the Shakespeare influence here, and any form of sonnet is tough to do, or at least do well, which you've done here...great piece of writing^^

[Adam M. Snow]

Thank you