Spring

Spring marks a new beginning and a fresh start for us...

The chilling winter breeze is down
As spring marks its arrival
The beauty of the countryside increases as though,
It were a covert with a lovely hue
The flowers bloom all the way long
The vehicles ply making noise - 'ting tong'
Here comes, buzzing a little bee
Searching for nectar and its home to be
The enthralling atmosphere spreads the message of peace,
As if the place were God's own masterpiece
But Beware, the lovely season brings with it
Diseases such as chickenpox and measles
And soon the warm season prevails,
And because of the heat, people wail
As spring bids adieu to come next year
And summer makes the people to fear.

Author's Note

Pheww!! Posted at last..This is the very first poem of a 12 year old😅 Please feel free to criticize. I wrote this poem long ago in spring but I was to nervous to post it. Do tell me how it is.

Reviews

[Riddhi]

Oh!Its actually nice according to a 12year old and that too first time..My first writing was actually so bad that i still feel nervous to post it here!!! I liked the way you wrote about spring and especially your rhyming words were perfect...
I just wished if it would have you know some more pleasant memories of spring and then you know bad things of summer that will just transport the writer from you know some pleasant things to scorching heat of summer..It would have been more interesting...
But overall this was really nice and you know for a first timer its actually the best you can do first time and that too at the age of 12!!!
Keep on writing and thanks for sharing...
Take care
Riddhi

[Sofia]

Wow! I super happy!! Thank you for ur kind visit...I didn't know that it was good...even I was nervous​ to post this here.. I'm sure ur first poetry was very good..come on..do post it..and yeah, I agree it would have been more interesting that way...but I kinda didn't know what lines to add :p... Take care..

[Sofia]

Forgot to add the "am" before super happy...

[Abraham George]

Oh!Its actually nice according to a 12year old
Riddhi i disagree with this. This poem is actually a good one even for a well experienced writer. so for a 12 year old this is awesome. i am sure that till now i didn't wrote a poem this much good

[Sofia]

Omg! Thanks so much for the compliment :) I'm so so so happy

[Zephyr]

Well you really had a wonderful start, Sofia...
Its a serene and lovable poem. The imagery is great!
A masterpiece for a beginning...
Keep sharing and don't be nervous at all cuz we are here to help if you need any....:)

[Sofia]

Thank you so much!! All the people at Writercafe.org are so lovely... I'm glad that you liked it..

[Wajiha Nayeem]

this is beautiful dear...i love this write and the way you wrote it is wonderful...keep going dear!

[Sofia]

Thank you so much!! I love having a friend like you...ur really so cute

[Great Aunt Astri]

And what a very good effort indeed? You have uses good descriptive words and dealt well with the subject matter
One suggestion ... where you have 'as though it were a covert with a lovely hue',, perhaps a simile might be even better .. 'Like a covert with a lovely hue.'

[Sofia]

Thank you so much Great Aunt Astri!! Thank you for your valuable suggestion!! 😃... Glad to know you liked it..

[Wajiha Nayeem]

am so happy for you sofia!

[Sofia]

And I'm happy for your birthday😘

[Najam Us Saher]

You have portrayed reality in this poem. That's what I liked the most. Very nice poem well done ☺

[Sofia]

Thank you so much!! This means a lot to me!!😃

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome. ☺

[matrixmark]

Not normally a poem reviewer but, this poem was simplicity itself but the images which you protrayed were perfect pictures of spring and all that i brings.
A pleasant read.

Mark.

[Sofia]

Thank you so much Mark!! Am so glad that you gave it a read.

[matrixmark]

Not a problem. Sorry I cant give a big review, I just struggle with poems. Stories are more my thing BUT I did like your picturesque piece.

Mark.

[Sofia]

No problem..your review was big enough and it was sweet!! Thank you once again..Well, I've started reading your story..

[matrixmark]

Enjoy - *HOW IT ALL BEGAN* is the best chapters to read.

Mark.