Droplets

Cacophonies of silver droplets simultaneously come in contact with the ground.
I stood there watching, making no sound
Turning to red drips, it reflected my sorrow.

Spreading, I dared to take a dip
Into the dark red velvet sea of hate,
In fear that I may quickly dissipate.
So instead I pour my soul into the latter
Lucid blood hitting the sea without making a splatter
Slowly they swirl and begin to mix
A ubiquitous cacophony of feelings leaving me transfixed.

Reviews

[HeavenSunArcadez]

so often we can have everything stable and somewhere within our peace watery/slippery pessimistic thoughts can always find a way in cause usually thats when we leave ourselves most vulnerable... especially when were reminded of something particular through a sudden trend, or omen ... and so often when we give into our emotions of negativity and bitterness then we are letting our soul be swallowed up transforming us into a person we wont even recognize, because we were too caught up to fight it at its roots... and once we become this new breed we have become something soulless that doesn't feel , lacks emotion and changed stuck in pandemonium .... hope i wasnt too far off from your meaning... and this was a powerful write.... excellent work on this one... very well written.

[Soma-ko]

I couldn't have worded it better myself, which resulted in my poem. Thank you encrypting my piece, putting it into words I can truly understand. I'm glad you enjoyed my poem.

[HeavenSunArcadez]

your welcome this was very extraordinary work, I look forward to reading more from you... I enjoy pieces that let me really think of whats being said then explaining what i got from them... excellent work

[Soma-ko]

Thanks, I hope you'll enjoy my later works.

[OBWhiteHawk]

Awesome. I had to read a couple times to get the meaning and the fact that you are 16...amazing to me. Great job.

[Soma-ko]

Thank you for the compliment, and honestly, When I wrote this it was because it sounded great in my head. It was after I wrote it, that I realized there was an actual meaning to this poem. Thank you for the review.

[OBWhiteHawk]

Wow no kidding! That actually makes it more cool.

[NA]

Another I enjoyed...but have no words for other than...brilliant!

[Soma-ko]

Hahaha, that word in itself is enough to make me smile. Glad you've taking a liking to my poems.

[NA]

oh yes i'm hooked :)

[Soma-ko]

Hahaha, you're the first person to ever say that, am I'm glad that you're the first since I also enjoy your poems very much. :)