Kismet

A living kismet, who knew it'd be you

a star I dreamed of, and a wish come true

and as our hearts finally collide

i knew all sorrow in me had died

 

Turn pages of memories, a picture of you

paintings in my head, as you never knew

and as the colors slowly fade to grey

twas' the day you had to go away

 

A smile that lights my love story through

and melting hearts, and teardrops dew

I've fallen way deep deep down below

If I hadn't told you, will you ever know

 

Crimson cheeks and warm embrace

I'll hold you here forever in place

Though even if we're oceans apart

Don't worry my darling for you have my heart.

Reviews

[Rob Santana]

Tear drop :,/ my bandana is drenched with tears. Creepers are not supposed to cry.

[Fréyjä Helvití]

Awww. Well thank you. And I'm glad it touched a sensitive part of your metal heart... (I think that didn't sound right) :v

[deepblue04]

this is a nice little poem. I like it! good job!

[That_Girl]

"i knew all sorrow in me had died" Capitalize 'I' :)

This is sweet. A nice, soft, romance poem that flows wonderfully. Lovely job!

[Fréyjä Helvití]

Sorry about that.. Thanks for pointing that out... :)

[MOON]

Flows well romantic write fate and destiny.

[Michael X]

this poem has a real lyrical feeling that floats along, the words are romantic
and stamps the moment with a sense of timeless adoration, excellent job.

[eglantine]

Strange, my good friend just explained to me what kismet is. So when I saw your title, I gravitated towards it. Dainty love poem--almost nursery rhyme-esque