The Marvelous Little Way

My shriveled black heart

May have found a new spark

In the marvelous little way

That you say

That you care

 

My black wings

Tired and sore from flying

May have found a place to rest

Because the marvelous way 

That you say

That you care

Is simply the best

 

My harsh cries

Have long made my throat sore

But you may have fought  away my tears

For the marvelous little way

That you say 

That you care

May have cleared my fears

 

My broken heart

My beating wings

And all of my desperate cries,

Have been silenced just a little

By the marvelous way

That you say

That you care

 

And though this is just temporary,

And tomorrow I might not be as happy

This I know,

That I love the marvelous little way

That you say

That you care

Author's Note

*cough cough* Just my way of saying thank you. I would have written it in a story, because I'm not a very good poet, but I get the distinct impression that you like poems more. Yep.... er.... That's it I suppose.

Reviews

[closed]

Falling waters from a crystal stream bathe me in the sincere tide of your heartfelt words, words that shine like a glittering white diamond masked by a coarse black beryl. ^

''My black wings
Tired and sore from flying
May have found a place to rest
Because the marvelous way
That you say
That you care
Is simply the best''

The epicenter of this piece. And perhaps that's all I could ask.
Thanks so much Story. Get better. Everyone wants you to. There's too much you still have to write.^^

-your sincere friend

-Dream

[*Evelen*]

Your a great poet, too. My favorite stanza was the last. It was nice, and sweet! =)

"And though this is just temporary,
And tomorrow I might not be as happy
This I know,
That I love the marvelous little way
That you say
That you care,"

Yup Great job! Like this poem lots! =)

[Denni]

pretty good!(for once hehe) no really this was nice, seems to be the opposite of what you normaly write, i like the metaphors like my shriveled black heart. now get well. NOW

[Dillon Cotter]

Very nice, with the metaphors and just imagery/comparrisons of you to something with wings, etc. I fidn this write very good and creative!

-Will

[deeps]

My harsh cries
Have long made my throat sore
But you may have fought away my tears
For the marvelous little way
That you say
That you care
May have cleared my fears

I loved this stanza here,
This is wonderful and staright from your heart,
Wonderful flow of words here.