Heirloom Braids

I leave them lilies
In the lace of my braided hair.

A sweet aroma for my children ,
Of soiled toiling
And petals of perseverance .

I have planted my seed.
Let love
Be my legacy.

Strong stems
For them to climb,
Each trial and thorn
Pushing them further
Into the beautiful flowers
They were meant to be.

Blossoming from
My bosom .

Reviews

[Glen Yumang Manese]

I leave them lilies
In the lace of my braided hair.
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I leave those lilies
In the lace of my braided hair.

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seems that is more fitting there --
but just my IMPO...
as for the verse itself...
I was wanting more in this write...
just ends relatively short...
but may be its just me...or a change in the ending:

Blossoming from
My bosom .
---
From my bosom
blossoming...

[Sweet Brevity]

ThANKYOU ;)

[Glen Yumang Manese]

you're welcome...

[Roger Turgeon]

Second time through I read a farewell into this poem. Words like "leaving" and "legacy". As usual I'm probably reading too much into those words...or as is more likely the case too little. No matter a verse well penned and a reminder to us all to leave strong stems for our children to climb.

[Sweet Brevity]

Thank you Roger.. Yes you are right in your "leaving" sense of it. On a personal level , I am a mother who's escaped death by the grace of God on many occasion . Thank you for your words and input. ;)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i love this piece...from a mother to her children...flowers do blossom from my bosom, metaphorically...

i see this poem as a perfect allegory of birth and nurturing our children,...

and for me the length works...but then i am much a fan of "less is more" and i find that you do not waste words at all.

[Sweet Brevity]

Thank you Jacob, you also inspire much through your poetry. And also I'
a fan of "less is more " as my brain does not allow me to write further.. Lol

[Sweet Brevity]

Thank you for suggestions. I'm also quite happy you took the time to read it let alone critique ;) much appreciated.