Illuminate

I'm drawn to your light,

Though it dispel my darkness

I long for you to bleed it dry

The obsidian of my soul

Conquered by a gentle touch,

Unexpected truth cutting deep .

Reviews

[Ally Monique]

Short, but meaningful piece. I really like the line "obsidian of my soul." It's a fun image :) Keep writing!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

truth often does cut deep...sometimes we might think the truth is better hidden...but it's not...better to have the light bled, as heart bleeds as the conscience bleeds...a gentle touch can conquer anything.

[Roger Turgeon]

You might want to add an "s" to dispel. Interesting imagery...I don't often think of bleeding the darkness with light...usually the other way around. Thanks for making me put my thinking cap on. ( : O )

[Sweet Brevity]

Hi Roger;) thank you for you comment. I'm not sure what you mean by "s"? Dissipate has two "s"..hmmm. Now ya got me with my thinking cap on;)

[Sweet Brevity]

Oh! Now I get it! ;) thanks!;) and the end of the word..

[Not Your Typical New Yo..]

Wow. It was short but gripping, full of truth about human emotions, what we tend to see is most of the time false, ant that knowledge cuts deep into our skin. Clever!!!

[Sweet Brevity]

Thank you Greg! I appreciate your kind words;)

[Sweet Brevity]

Willweb ! Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it.;)

Darlene

[willweb]

This poem was wonderful. You said so much in so few lines and that is not easy to do. I enjoyed this today.

[Sweet Brevity]

Thank you willweb!;) again