The Breath of Sunshine

She was so young then.
Like the buds sprouting
In Springtime.

There was a steady
Frost that came over
Her youthful land.

The world took her own flesh
And covered her own heart.
Her mind soon followed.


Nor could it make the journey,

her sunshine soul.
The journey into
Wiser years
Of ripened
Age.

That journey ceased
Fruition.

Oh what a lovely
Dream in a lazy summer breeze,

She was just a breath,
That beautiful sunshine soul.

Reviews

[willweb]

This poem was magical in feel and so very beautiful in its message. I really enjoyed this. I like your style a lot.

[Sweet Brevity]

What a lovely comment! ;) thanks again. Enjoying your poetry as well.

[MsJewel]

The images you have created are lovely. Beautifully written. I enjoyed reading this very much.

:) Julie

[Sweet Brevity]

Thank you Julie
;) Darlene

[Not Your Typical New Yo..]

What I really like about this is that this a poem of becoming of age, and what I really like is that you use more a natural theme to it, because age is indeed natural. We may find ourselves different, loosing our "innocence," trying and exploring new and erotic things. But that's just life. Thanks for sharing.

[Sweet Brevity]

Hi Greg. Thank you for your comments. On my previous online writing community, I mostly wrote heavy erotic prose and poetry. Here I am new and very much hoping to show a different style of my writing and spread my wings a bit . Thanks again;)

[Not Your Typical New Yorker]

Hey, Don't worry. I started out with dark poetry, now I'm actually writing more erotica.

[Edward Lancheister]

lovely words that written, my favorite line "Wiser years
Of ripened
Age. "

beautiful words

[Sweet Brevity]

Thanks Edward! I promise to read your writing as well! Thank you for taking the time to read my words;)

[priya]

Beautiful thoughts and beautifully written.

[Sweet Brevity]

Thank you Priya! I appreciate your taking the time to read it and I'm glad you enjoyed;)

[priya]

my pleasure.... :)

[John Ryan]

her sunshine soul.
The journey into
Wiser years
Of ripened
Age.
wonderful

[Sweet Brevity]

Thank you John ;) I appreciate the read.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that frost does come...innocence and sunshine get lost, as time drops its aging dew upon us...as we learn the journey under total sunshine ends, and the clouds become more prevalent ....

but that breath was nice while it lasted.

jacob

[Sweet Brevity]

Thank you Jacob;) I enjoyed your interpretation of it. I agree;)