Just When

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Just when i think all is gone
a  whisper of you comes along
a thought, sweet and gentle
a smile adorns my face
I  guess my heart loves you
the thought of your embrace

Just when i think all is gone
you enter my mind like a song
maybe just sentimental
my heart starts to race
remembering your hue
my love for you can not erase

Just when i think all is gone
just like egg foo yong
though intercontinental
a blush upon my face
over an ocean of blue
my memory doth trace

Just when i think all is gone
a teardrop slips like a sarong
though the feeling is mental
we entwined, a shoe lace
in love me and you
our memories still interlace

Just when i think all is gone
a bell within sings ding dong
just instrumental
thoughts of you doth grace
a pas de deux
memories arranged in a vase

Just when i think all is gone
you come along...along again

©SyberRose

Author's Note

thank you for reading

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Just when i think all is gone
a teardrop slips away like a sarong
though the feeling is mental
we entwined, a shoe lace
in love me and you
our memories still interlace

This is my favorite stanza...I love the imagery for the shoe lace and the way that you use it to describe the interlacing of memories. Our minds have a way of doing this; tying things together for reference purposes, thus creating an eternal bond between certain things, and often times people as well.

This was a sublime and haunting write. I can feel the ebb and flow of the imagery like that of the ocean, rising and falling with the tides. Well done.

[SyberRose]

Thank you so much Sarah and i am happy you enjoyed it...Rose:)

[s y e]

Always try and look on the bright side. Where there is bad, there is good, Rose - another amazing job, hon. Well done.

~ Noodle.

[SyberRose]

Thank you Noodle...hugss...thanks for peeking in dear...:)

[wunder]

~there is such a special dependable emotion in this-it's very special!-and
what's even better is there's is so much appreciation throughout!~ :))
~"Just when i think all is gone
a teardrop slips away like a sarong
though the feeling is mental
we entwined, a shoe lace
in love me and you
our memories still interlace"~

~So LoVeLy !!!~ :))

[SyberRose]

Thank you James...and thanks for visiting tonight...Rose:)

[wunder]

~You're Welcome~It's My Pleasure!~ :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

There is a light at the end of every tunnel... good things are bound to happen no matter how bad things get. An uplifting poem.

[SyberRose]

Thank you Dale...this is an old one but you are right...good things do happen...Rose:)

[Soma-ko]

A lovely poem with a nice and smooth tempo throughout. Much enjoyed. :)

[SyberRose]

Thank you very much Soma...I appreciate you visit...:)

[PurpleQuartz]

This was really beautiful, I really loved the way it rhymed so perfectly. Such a pleasure to read.

[SyberRose]

Thank you Pq...I'm happy you enjoyed this piece as I wrote it a loooonnnng time ago ha...Rose:)

[Cassie]

wow!!! This is so beautifully written, I love love love it.

[SyberRose]

Thank you Cassie and Im glad you liked it as its an oldie...Rose:)

[ShelleyA]

This is an amazing write Rose. The intricate rhyming, skillfully done. Imagery and descriptives are vivid. Flow and tone is delightful. Deep expression of emotion as you express this love you have for this special person in your life. Good word choice as is your use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. A wonderful write. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

[SyberRose]

Thank you so much for that amazing review Shelley...I do appreciate it...:)

[ShelleyA]

You're very welcome Rose. It's always a pleasure to read your poetry.

[Stella Armour]

i think this would make a lovely song Rose...

[SyberRose]

Thank you dear...well you never know..maybe some day haa...hugss

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A prose to gather your thoughts and relive, well done.

[SyberRose]

Thank you Thomas...and I hope you have a pleasant night...Rose:)