Do You Mind?

..... inside my very being things are going on quick, fast and

in a hurry. My nerves were shot down. Feelings hurt. What else

 to say? Oh yeah, the very thing I thought would happen, didn't 

take place.  

..... suddenly reject doused me wit no feeling at all.  

I was shaken in unbelief. No one is suppose to tell me no.  I thought.

None the less, the reject, dam it made me nu..mmmb to my avail.

I'm inside my feelings, right now.  Overwhelmed I am.

..... calculating nothing from something I thought could go my

way.  Not as planned. Something inside, my pride won't let me

be just anybody.  My great mind talks wit me. So, do you mind if

me and my mental status matures long on, until....................

Reviews

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Excellent write Roxane. You get right down to the bottom line-“calculating nothing from something”- been there, done that. Love the” ...”and the free form of the verses- like internal conversation going on. I’m inside my feelings...Overwhelmed I am.”- Just superb!

[ROXANE DORSEY]

I am very glad to know you enjoyed the piece. thanks for the kindness you rendered.

[DAVID VELDE]

I'm inside my feelings, right now, Caulculating somthing from nothing I thought could go my way.

Oh, do I know that feeling and I'm sure many others do. Great poem! Thank you!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

sometimes, our pride will just not accept failure----

and we burst inside---Ben Franklin once said to use the disappointment, step over it and move on stronger.

good piece...
j.