These Tears

My first Senryu for a contest....

 

These tears in my eyes

are all for you, my sweet love.

Take them and be gone.

Reviews

[The Viking]

Beautiful. Your writing reminds me of water for some reason, I don't know if it's the font you use, the words, style, probably a combination of them all, but in a way it reminds me of sparkling streams of water. A very powerful image. This is pretty, I look forward to writing more.

[Wolfwind Words]

Simply beautiful! :) Like a precious vile of tears that the knight rides off with to keep him safe on his journey!
Great Write!

[JayaMae]

I love this...

[BlakeL79]

As beautiful as it is simple. So much a emotion in such few words. You can feel what is going on - the tears are forced from the person, almost squeezed out, and then thrown at the one who caused them. It is delicious in its tragedy. Well done.

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

A what?lol This is very powerful and poetic...A wonderful, thoughtful read.

[The Tao of Bri]

Felt this too many times before.. Excellent poem as it invoked the emotions bitterly..

[Ken Simm.]

Know exactly how this feels Tania. Exactly. Such a poem.

[bluessadmood]

nice work tania ,sweet and simple ,right to the heart

[Phil Sanders]

Tender and heart rending .....

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Great senryu, truly enjoyed this. Simple and full of emotion in three little lines.

Great Write