Honey trap

A union racing off the chart
He had her love her soul her heart
Their bodies ached when forced apart
They met when very young

They took off on exotic flights
Saw sandy beaches northern lights
All set to put the world to rights
With every song they sung

The argument was lightening fast
They both exhumed each others past
The end was nigh the dye was cast
As hate rolled off the tongue

Her bitterness said phone a friend
She'll test him to the brutal end
No currency or trust to spend
Confused and highly strung

Her bra strapped shoulder caught his eye
A mini skirt that can't deny
Suspended stockings silky thigh
The honey trap was sprung

Reviews

[Norman 223]

As one, who can easily become "lost" when trying to decipher metaphors , I share Margie's comments on your straightforward style of writing that doesn't require a lot of "guesswork" as to the meaning of the "story." Having now read more of your work I shall get round to reviewing more of your writing as soon as possible, but, annoyingly,now find typing a very difficult and slow business these days.
Regards Norman

[Tepo]

Thank you very much for visit Norman
Please don't worry about typing anything to me
Knowing I've been read by you is honour enough
RESPECT sir

[barleygirl]

This is brilliant writing! I love the snappy pace, the popping rhyme & rhythm, and the straightforward storytelling with an ironic "I-told-ya-so" undertone. You describe all the typical s**t that goes down, but every single line is written in a fresh way . . . none of that boring predictable relationship barf. At the end, I feel like I've been slapped from head to toe (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Tepo]

Such a lovely review
Thank you Margie
Very supportive
Sorry for the slapping
Couldn't resist

[poetgurl (Plainly Meg)]

Love the last stanza, very cute and well written

[Tepo]

Thanks Ang
You were 1st to welcome here
I appreciate the support
Ta

[Chris Shaw]

Ah, the dreaded honey trap. When trust flew out the window. This is a skilled composition Tepo. Well penned and enjoyed.

Chris

[Tepo]

Thank you Chris
Glad you enjoyed
Extremely grateful

[John the Baptist]

Well, looks aren't everything. An excellent piece here about the fragility of relationships based on externals. It has great meter, unique rhyming and is faithful to the rhyme scheme. It would make a good ballad for the right singer.

[Tepo]

thanks very much John
A very kind review
Much appreciated