Restoration - Part II (thank you sanity)

okay... i think it's complete

you dislodged me whilst i resisted;

you flowed heart-warm and genuine,

but i was determined and persisted.

a terrified and stringless mannequin;

refusing your truth yet once again,

not realizing your eyes focused quietly,

unblinking , withdrawn from sin.

and whilst i cried there defiantly,

you were an elder statesman waiting silently

until i looked over, your validity revealed:

a realm of safety as well reminded me

surrendering leaves nothing to conceal.

and once i lost the fear that kept me cowering,

my soul became sun soaked, forever flowering.

Author's Note

Spenserian Sonnet
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- seriously folks, critiques won't offend me. It's actually why I'm here If it feels forced, contrived, or convoluted feel free to chime in.

Reviews

[Jack...]

Ok, now I think I can see. The funny thing my friend...it is always out there, waiting, the beautiful light, you just have to WANT to see it. I know, so much easier said than done, especially when the wieght of sorrow is piled so high you can see nothing else, but it is there. This is cool my friend and I don't know why, but I have suddenly become very emotional responding to your poem.

[m.s.early]

Heart felt thanks Jack. It is humbling that you share this note. It really means a lot and is fruitful encouragement.

[Frieda P]

The soul soaking in flourished flowers, is that all it takes to be sane. I'd never be able to thank sanity since I lost that address a long time ago, this has a lot to do with denial it seems, surrender is always the hardest part. Much food for thought here, well done xavier, saving this one, just in case. ;-)

[m.s.early]

(: you nailed it frieda. i was trying to capture the restoration of sanity from the layers of denial. Thanks for your review. :)

[Frieda P]

The pleasure was mine, I can relate on so many levels :-)

[B. Maaitah]

This poem carried lots of deep thoughts that leave you pondering on and on... many words lingered in my head, and many made me read again... I like your rhyme schemes in your poems and this one in particular... so much to learn from you :) .. job well done.

[m.s.early]

(: thank you "B", but i'm just learning myself. there's so much more to learn... :)

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. I like how you represented sanity with a flower soaking the sun and other harsh elements( denials and rejections ) representing the soul of all individuals where we seek to be in unison with nature and the universe to go back to the original state......Keep up the great work , sir...In my library...:)........

[m.s.early]

Thank you Sami. With sincerest depth, I believe that nature instills sanity at birth, but we mature away from it, learning to lean on our own understanding. Some of us are lucky enough to have a moment of clarity and be returned by grace to a state of understanding that nature intended for us. Some of us lean our own understanding long enough to reach the gates of insanity. Peace and balance are synonymous with nature.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. So true and poetically worded. So much wisdom you have...You are welcome ...:)...................

[Sami Khalil]

One of your best...:).........................

[m.s.early]

I looked at your critique again Sami. I made a revision in lines 8 & 9 that I think clarified the flow. What do you think?

[Sami Khalil]

I like it alot. I agree with Shaun Payton too...Bravo.................

[Shaun Payton]

Sami name dropping lol Its perfect Xavier.

[Sami Khalil]

:).........................