Whose Heart Does She Make Beat Faster? (SFR)

Another Stanza to Roberta...

======================================================
Whose Heart Does She Make Beat Faster? (SFR)
======================================================

Whose heart does she make beat faster
As she once did to mine?
She of the smile that won my heart
She was to me divine
And as all angels do
She flew away from me
And I the fool the love I had
I never let her see
But someone somewhere has a beating heart
That she makes beat faster still
As mine did then when her I knew
And always will until
Upon my deathbed when of age
My mind will wander over life gone past
The smile the smile the lovely smile
Shall in my memory last.

 

Stanzas for Roberta

The stanzas for Roberta are now loading in their own page on my official website, with a menu on the right to read from one to the next. Sign the guestbook while you are there...

Reviews

[Tony Murray]

This is beautifully sad. The words tell a tale of yearning and thinking of lost love that makes the heart ache, yet the pace and construction of the rhyming scheme make a bit upbeat and cheery. Its as if you are saying that you have lost something great and while you miss it you miss it fondly. I can hear it being sung in a pub somewhere as I read. Great write.

[ape domenigoni]

very beautiful...

[O!]

A beautiful memory...smile for that.

x,
O!

[Emily Rose]

A very pretty and touching piece! I liked the way it moved and the style struck me as rather Elizabethan, which was great to read. My only critique is that the rhythm changes abruptly with the line "But someone somewhere has a beating heart" and doesn't quite get back on track until "The smile the smile the lovely smile/Shall in my memory last." You might need to do a little revising to make it more even, but apart from that the poem is lovely!

[holly]

I hear the drums softly beating in your work, and this is no exception. No one could fail to find the Celtic heart in you.

[Debra Stevens Edwards (..]

This is a sad but beautifully written piece. The passon and longing are entwine through out this piece. We feel it with every word we read.
Debby

[Becca]

What an exquisite piece of writing.
It speaks a truth without self-pity
Very well done.

[cyanskye]

Beautiful, very bittersweet, but not sad. Lost love can be a pleasant memory.

[HoorayForUnderdog]

reading this makes me wonder about all the ways that people can have an impact on other's lives without realizing...your poem is lovely and sad...gives me the impression of true love...he comes across as valuing her happiness over his own

[Eunice Crankyponts]

Simply beautiful.