Wind

Beautiful woman
Outside; a blustery breeze
Amber strands flowing

Reviews

[Merancapeman]

Ah, hello dear friend. I'm back, and I think I'll review this latest puppy of yours.

It's simple, and shows an image that one would expect to see when their eyes fall upon an attractive woman. It does not pack a powerful punch, but at the same time it does not need one, because like beauty things do not have to be complicated. In all, I like your haiku, and I'd give it a rating if I knew how to utilize the rating system on this site. I just don't get it, really, because I was only gone for a few months. Where are the stars?! Still, good job. It looks lke you're having a lot of fun with haikus. You've been doing this for a while, I take it?

[Kara Emily Krantz]

aw. this is sweet. not sure how i feel about the use of the word 'beautiful' because it's overused, but the last line is delicious. great job

[Adamdust]

Ah. i see you getting the hang of it better. you hav a great juxtaposition which is the glue in haiku (i regret saying that corny phrase). i'm not gonna leave you a volume this time! but want to ask you look at this idea and consider it in your own way:"Beauty" is something we all experience, i hope. see that tag statement i just made? i guess i don't know if it is something we all experience. i assume so, i'm not that deep of a skeptic, but my point is: what if there was a haiku made of only one word. look i'll write it:Beautifulbut what is it? must i hold it to know, see it, smell it? do i tell others what it is and expect them to know it too? the problem is we all understand something in life to be beautiful, but it is only beautiful to the person, one by one.if i have to imagine something about the image you are provoking that isn't represented by a word you chose than i'm taking liberties with the haiku you've worked really hard on forming. i mention this because i realize that i know many beautiful women who are bald (some anyway) and "beautiful woman" doesn't tell me "in what way" she is beautiful. and in order to create an awesome juxtaposition reconsider how you decide to influence our understanding of beauty when it comes in the form of a woman.i'm thinking hair and amber waves is supposed to be the image, but because beauty can be subjective, and tends to be vague as a result, i'm forcing myself to create my own image of beauty and not the image intended by the haiku.i'm happy with this haiku. this is a good direction. you're doing a good job exploring the limits and the obstacles and i look forward to reading from you again!ps, i guess this was voluminous after all!oh hey, i forgot to mention (this is my edit to my review) i realize you describe the woman as a brunette in your poem description, but that isn't the haiku itself. if the description is more informative than the haiku, then there is a problem. but keep in mind also the complexity inherent in trying to collect this image. hair length, highlights, styles, hue, color, windswept, straight, curly, coarse, thin, thick - ugh. so much! its hard, but it is possible. makes you wonder: how simple is anyone's hair? haha. s**t i still take 5 minutes to make mine, and its about 5 centimeters long.that's one thing i love about finding difficulty in my own haiku: simplicities become that much more appreciated.

[Gordon Greene]

I have my own lovely brunette. This is a fitting Haiku.
g.g.

[Melissa M.]

Nice, descriptive and simple.

[Whirl]

gorgeous...made me think of a mermaid lol
stunning piece

[Krystal Waters]

Really pretty... flowing hair, you captured the moment! Great job!

Krystal

[Jem]

BEAUTIFUL