Crush

Crush

I need to feel you close

Please don’t forget about me

I hear the multiple echoes

My eyelids are getting heavy

 

I can only feel despair

Slowly losing consciousness

But you just don’t seem to care

She always looks so flawless

 

I want to scream so loud

Make your eardrums explode

Quickly swallowed by the crowd

No time left to reload

 

And the scars on my wrist show

All the pain you left behind

Look at my scratched elbow

If I could only rewind

 

It feels like a dark alley

Or maybe a countdown

Just wish I could be happy

Right before I drown

 

Reviews

[Joanna Maharis]

This is a heartfelt piece with very powerful emotions and imagery. I like the darkness in this piece. It kind of reminds me of Amy Lee's (of Evanescence) writing style. Some beautiful work you've done here. You've have enabled me not only to sympathize with the character in this narration, but I have been enabled to empathize with her, and you have enabled me as a reader to live the experience through the eyes of the narrator and feel the emotions of the narrator as if she and I were of one element, which makes this piece really very beautiful.

[LlamaLord]

Very interesting. Simple but very much so, full of meaning. I could really feel the emotions joining with your words right after stanza two. Another nice piece :)