Numb to the Pain

Numb to the Pain

A Poem by Underestimated

This is a song turned into a poem, the song has much more words.


It all came crashing down so quickly

Her mind was going crazy

No one ever asked

If she even ever agreed

It was all out of her control

Her father drowning in alcohol

Then the knife came down


And the      blood     came out


First she tried to cut,

Next, she didn’t know what


Her heart breaks everyday

But it doesn’t hurt when they sting

Because she is numb to the pain


It felt like it was good enough

To just toss away the sorrow

But everyday her core

Would get more and more hollow


She couldn’t take it

It was impossible to live

Tears fell into the water

As she edged over the bridge


The first time in a lifetime

She got down and started to pray

She said ‘God, don’t just numb my pain’







© 2012 Underestimated

Author's Note

So, I was thinking this should be more of a short story, but I wrote it as a poem first. BE CRITICAL. please,please,please be critical. I put my poems on here to get better!!! :-)
Love all ya'll.

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Love the use of differnt font, and ending is brilliant, a wondefful heartfelt write. Thankyou

Posted 12 Years Ago

I like how the major themes on how teens feel is in the larger font. The entire theme is in my opinon a teen who has been troubled and is just now releasing their pain and emotions. I feel this way sometimes and by reading this, in a way it soothed me. Well done and an amazing write. This is soooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo going in my library

Keep up the amazing work Underestimated. :)

Posted 12 Years Ago

oww this is sooo sad :'(. Good job, you made me really feel this poem - how can I be critical to this? I just can't, its so lovely and perfect, excellent job

Posted 12 Years Ago

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so sad and lonely poem, i like the way all the letters from small to big size. Its true that when you suffer pain almost everyday it gets numb day by day until your hollow. good write my friend, enjoyed it.

Posted 12 Years Ago

This is beautifully written, sad, but well written. I enjoy what you did with the font and I love how it tells a story.

Posted 12 Years Ago

Hey nice poem..I haven't written poems like sad..sometimes alarming..

Posted 12 Years Ago

Whoa. I'd like to be critical, but actually, I can't. There is nothing here to criticise. It is very good, I don't even mind the fonts and layout. I enjoyed it. This could definitely be expanded upon and does have a feel of a song about it. Nice work.

Posted 12 Years Ago

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Added on May 23, 2012
Last Updated on May 23, 2012
Tags: emo, cut, drinking, teen, suicide, God, relief, pray, bridge, live, die



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