Beautiful Soul

Everyone has that one person that they are sure is their soulmate, a person with whom they have some sort of connection. Sometimes those feelings can be put in words.

Beautiful soul

You were standing there

With your lovely flowing hair

you seemed like a goddess, I swear

With you, I'd walk everywhere

You made my heart skip more than one beat

That, my lady is no ordinary feat

Your eyes, and your smile so sweet

And your heart, like a clean white sheet

I realised, in love I fell

Without you it wasn't hell, 

But you know Oh well,

Only on thoughts of you my heart would dwell

It did not matter if it was love or hate,

All I knew was that we were bound by fate

Seeing you, my heart rate elevates

Being with you was more than great!

In your heart, my love I had to chart

Then I decided and I dressed sharp,

I went ahead to steel my heart 

And steal your heart

Success! My boat finally reached your shore

You and I are now a complete whole

Together, we shall grow old

For you are my beautiful soul

Reviews

[Daisy Ackerman]

A very sweet poem on a popular but meaningful theme. I particularly love the last two lines. Also your use of "steel" and "steal" in successive lines was a very good play on words. It does a good job of portraying someone who must brace oneself for the worst before they go in for love, which is something that I know I feel when I really like someone.

[Sage]

Glad you can relate.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Such a beautiful poem, I'm a sucker for romantic poetry. :)
Seems like this one came straight from your heart and was about someone special.
I loved the rhyming once again, I think the rhyming makes the poem come together and sound more like a poem.
This was filled with heart and emotion, so much love.
Truly beautiful :)

[Sage]

Haha, thanks. You can say that this came straight out of my heart, and I'm glad you liked it :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Your welcome.
I really did :)

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful and hopeful poem.
"Success! My boat finally reached your shore
You and I are now a complete whole
Together, we shall grow old
For you are my beautiful soul"
I agree. All of us a soulmate. Just hard to know and find. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Sage]

You're welcome. Thank you for the encouraging words!

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.

[Tiffany K Charles]

what a beautifully written ballet.... I'm jealous of whomever she is....... ;-)

[Sage]

Haha thank you! That's probably the best compliment I could get! :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Beautiful, eloquent and lovely piece!
I can see that each stanza is framed systematically to follow a rhyme scheme that provides a smooth flow to the whole piece.
Well done! I like rhyming.
Love is that magic, that can bring best out of us.
Emotive and vivid imagery.
I liked it very much!

[Sage]

Thank you! And yes, love is a very strong emotion! Words are the best medium to express those amazing feelings. I'm glad you liked it :D

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

You are welcome.

[Aswin R Prasad]

It's got a lovely feel to it..Great use of words.. And my favorite is the last stanza..
Enjoyed it to the end ! :) Keep writing..

[Sage]

Thank you! I am going to post a new poem in 5 minutes!

[McBear]

I love the tone and feel you incorporated into this. Much different than some love poems I have seen/wrote but it works and it very good! You explained the time well and how it made you feel in some heavy imagery. Well done.

[Sage]

Thank you!

[TheMalady]

Oh... This one is like a song. You can actually make a tune for this one. Very beautiful and vivid. After reading this, it touched my heart and soul. Also, I like how you rhymed the words. They ring wonderfully to my ears. It's just so nice.

Truly, this poem reflects how inspired and in love you are towards writing. Great poem(song)! I love it!

-Keep writing! :)

[Sage]

Thanks a lot! I generally write poems which can be tuned because I sing my poems when I write them down!

[TheMalady]

Now that explains it! Truly, you are one of a kind. Not anyone can do that. However, writers who are inclined to music or the Arts tend to be more creative in their writings. This is so true in your case. :) Keep it up! :)

[Nigel Newman]

If I may chip in, I thought exactly the same. So much like a song. So my only suggestion would be some kind of bridge or break in a different meter - other than in folk songs it's rare to hear 6 verses of the same tune without a variation in the middle. Regards, Nigel

[K-O-I]

"I realised, in love I fell, Without you it wasn't hell, But you know Oh well," Love that man, real Cobainesq lol Well done.

[Sage]

Haha thanks mate.