Listen, Girl

My breath was all shaky while writing this <3

Remember all those times

you pulled me to the side

said 'girl I know that you'd be here'

I'm staring at the brick walls

how could they have known

where to find me?

where to find me?

Do you remember days

when you wanted to grow up

Bet you weren't expecting this

But the fire will die down

you'll be in the dark again

but listen, girl

it can't be that dark

Well I know you look in the mirror

and you hate what's looking back

and you got this heart of gold

and a hand nobody holds

sleeping in an real cold bed

can't get out of your own head

do you hear the people whisper?

gotta trust it ain't 'bout you

Do you remember days

when you wanted to grow up

Bet you weren't expecting this

But the fire will die down

and you'll be in the dark again

but listen, girl

it don't have to be that dark

it took a little while

for you look it in the eye

but you fought off all your demons

still can't remember why

and nobody knows

how hard it's been in 

these past few months, or so

but listen, girl, you just can't let go

cause at the end of your path

there is bright white sign

says 'you made it'

says 'you made it'

Do you remember days

when you wanted to grow up

Bet you weren't expecting this

But the fire will die down

and you'll be in the dark again

but listen, girl

it don't have to be that dark

Reviews

[ATG]

A damn good and well written poem. There were great lines in this one and the use of repetition at key points was very well done. Overall, another great read.

[Guilt]

'You got this heart of gold, and a hand nobody holds.' - The smoothness of these lines had me repeating them in my head. A very encouraging piece. A guy can only imagine what's it like to live in this modern world of perfectly edited women and rom-com endings. So much pressure...

- Guilt

[4$H]

Love it!! Powerful read :)

[A. V. Madison]

Thank you :)

[zainul]

Really,'you made it', Alice :)

[A. V. Madison]

Indeed I have, Zainul. Thank you, it's always a pleasure to hear from you.

[zainul]

This is really a great success,Alice :)