It’s Only A Temporary Good-Bye

Somber summery of life's lows.

She sits and stares at her little flakes of snow

Like butterflies, they fly from her fingers

Only to land on brown ashes.

 

She weeps for her lover’s broken soul,

Yet while her own is so tattered and jaded.

She cries out in the night for them both;

Both but lonely children in a bigger box

 

With no windows.

 

At least before, there were windows…

 

Sunshine is only a dream now;

A memory of a happiness she never had.

 

She sits and stares at her little flakes of snow

Like butterflies, they fly from her fingers

Only to land on brown ashes.

 

She wishes she had better news to give

The one she truly loves.

She never wanted the sunshine anyway; fools play in it.

 

And that’s no good.

 

There’s no home for them now. No more worries.

 

She always wanted to be like those snowflakes,

But she never intended to fall. 

Author's Note

All my poetry comes from the heart.

Reviews

[Odayin]

I didn't realize how much I missed new poems that say "All my poetry comes from the heart" in the authors note, but your style and skill has only been improving.
This was a wonderful poem, i always find i have to read your poems at least twice (something I usually don't have to do) and i always love it even more the second time around.
All your poetry really does come from the heart..there's no way any other piece could create something so gentle and magnificent...and that goes for all your poems. They always flow even without rhythm, almost kind of just glide across your mind and adroitly stop in the most heart pumping spots.
Anyway, this one itself was great, I just loved how you related a persons feeling to snow, which in itself, symbolized something else.

"She never wanted the sunshine anyway; fools play in it."
That line was truly gorgeous. So much meaning and it could easily rise goosebumps. It's always a shock and a wonderful story when someone's life long dream becomes the line they would never tempt crossing.
Once again, beautiful job, please...keep it up!

[Wild Willow Blue]

Thank you; wow! I am so glad you enjoyed it. I only write about what I feel, and what I know. I'm not going to go into detail, but I am at a point in my life where I really realize what it is that I want for myself, and it's different than what others want from me. This piece goes into that, which, as I can see, you understood. It makes me happy that you say you have to read my poems at least twice, and that you like them even more so when you do. That makes me realize that you get what I write about, and what I feel, and not many people do. So thank you for the big goofy smile you gave me. :D

[Odayin]

Haha I know exactly how you feel. You are very much welcome! There's not a thing I would change in this one!
And no worries, I smiled goofily when I read your comment:)

[reflectingus]

Yes, I can feel your heartfelt words, just flawlessly bringing out the poignant emotions. When we're well deep into our pits of despondency, hope may seem miles away, though it may be just there at our fingertips, in reality.
"She never wanted the sunshine anyway; fools play in it."
A brilliant poem.

[Wild Willow Blue]

Thank you so much. I am thrilled that you liked it!

[afra]

i can clearly see that it came from your heart ...well done

[Wild Willow Blue]

Thank you. :P

[nigrum homonculus]

its been a long time since you posted work...and i can truly say i have missed it. that last line just made it. you did very well. well done. i love it!

[Wild Willow Blue]

Thank you. I have missed posting work, as well. I'm really glad you have enjoyed this.

[Virtuosa X]

This is lovely! I like what you did there with the repetition and anyone can "feel" that it truly comes from the heart.
And my favorite part:

"She wishes she had better news to give
The one she truly loves.
She never wanted the sunshine anyway; fools play in it.


And that’s no good.

There’s no home for them now. No more worries.

She always wanted to be like those snowflakes,
But she never intended to fall."
Great Job

[Wild Willow Blue]

Thank you, I am so glad you enjoyed it. That is my favorite part, as well.

[Virtuosa X]

You're welcome!

[eglantine]

dah! I love this! Especially the last line :D :D :D this just made my morning, thank you

[Wild Willow Blue]

I'm so glad!

[That_Girl]

You can really tell this is a personal poem. The emotion in it is wonderfully expressed.

"Sunshine is only a dream now;
A memory of a happiness she never had." Love this line. Well done!

[Wild Willow Blue]

Thank you so much! I am really glad you enjoyed it.