Mind at War

An internal dialogue of sorts

There's a war that is waging,
as explosions pierce the night.
Two sides, angrily opposed,
to no end they will fight.

But this isn't a war of nations,
neither factions nor religions.
This is a war of the mind,
torn between decisions.

The Right prefers free thinking,
"Follow your heart," it will say,
"What's the worst that could happen?
Just do it as you may."

The Left leans towards logic,
"Do the math, don't trust your gut;
the heart's just a blood pumping sap!
Use your head, or end up in a rut."

Left and Right shout each other down,
a never-ending debate.
Argument of the century,
in the balance is my fate.

So I wait for the conclusion,
as my temples throb with pain.
Hopefully this war of the mind
won't make me go insane.

Author's Note

Musings of a sleep deprived fool. Any feedback is greatly appreciated.

Reviews

[Indie Skreet]

this is the second of yours I have read and you are clearly a deep thinker with the ability to write worthwhile poetry. I wasn't keen on the two stanza's I have c & p'd as from what I read, I believe you are capable of better. Actually, the first three lines in the last stanza are good, it's just that last line which could be improved:

The Left leans towards logic,
"Do the math, don't trust your gut;
the heart's just a blood pumping sap!
Use your head, or end up in a rut."


So I wait for the conclusion,
as my temples throb with pain.
Hopefully this war of the mind
won't make me go insane.

[richom]

Exceptionally well-written, Will. One of the best of yours I've read thus far. The dilemma you describe is universal and there's no easy answer. Of course, one can always flip a coin and then blame fate if it doesn't turn out well. Your next to last stanza can also be read as a perfect description of politics in Washington today.

[Will]

I think of the depiction of Harvey Dent (Two-Face) in Christopher Nolan's Dark Knight when you say to flip a coin. Thanks for reading and for such praise, Rich.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Oh wow... you have depicted a war that I go through every day... the minute I wake up!!
Just ask my sister, Priscilla Moore, she'll tell you how much I complain about the turmoil of indecisions I face daily... uh!
This is a well penned account of your vexings! Nicely done!~xoxo~

[Will]

We all face this struggle on some level. Thank you, Robbie :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

My pleasure, Will. :)

[Nix]

An amazing depiction of the war between logic and dreams. Everyone has felt this at some time in their life, and you did a splendid job of bringing that to life through words.

[Will]

I'm glad you could relate, N.B. Thank you for your praise and reading

[Muse]

yup..been there and done that. But I'm afraid I lost that war...I now come here for therapy because it's cheaper than prescription drugs.

[Will]

Drugs have some nasty side effects, too. It's a few less strings attached on here. Glad you could relate, Muse. Thanks for reading

[Emmy]

I love this poem! It has that hint of humor in it that makes it fun to read! Great job, and keep up the good work;)

[Will]

Thank you, Emmy

[Andie]

Ah, I relate so much to this, it's like I've written it. Haha. I always enjoy your work.

[Will]

Glad you can relate, Amanda. Thank you

[Archia]

This poem has the type of flow that I could just read and read and read, it's where the rhyme works so well that it just goes on from one thing to the next and could just keep going. I also, really enjoyed what this poem was saying, I think this idea of an internal war is something where you can't really get a proper resolution and I felt that your poem said this with there not being an answer at the end, just this hope they won't go crazy. All in all, really nice.

[Will]

There really is no resolution; you may win the battle, but never the war. You really got the point of this piece, Archia, and I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for reading

[Cerulean]

Oh well blast, you certainly know how to blast someone's mind with 'Poem awesomeness', I hope it's contagious I could use some more awesomeness :)

I really love the flow of your words and how it just slips right off. It's almost like reading a story or watching a fast-paced debate. The rhyming is superb as well, love this poem :) :) :)

The night owl strikes again =)

[Will]

Haha yes! Hopefully you'll catch the bug, so we can see some great stuff (aside fro. The great stuff we have already seen :3). Rhyme is something I really strive for, so I'm glad you appreciated it. And yes, nighttime writing seems to do wonders for me.

[Cerulean]

I will make it my mission to steal the bug from you :D Oh pssh, from what I've seen Rhyme is as easy for you as it is for me to munch up all your chocolate pretzels :D Yup, you are most certainly a night wanderer :D

[Will]

LOL. Believe it or not, I think the rhymes are a bit more work than the pretzels.

[Cerulean]

Oh, you have much to learn my apprentice. It is hard work eating those pretzels. The art of eating Pretzels is harder than you think! It takes one skilled person- aka me- to chow through all those Pretzels. You will learn in time. How'd you like to sign up as my worthy apprentice on how to eat Pretzels the awesome way? :D

[Rita L. Sev]

The Left leans towards logic,
"Do the math, don't trust your gut;
the heart's just a blood pumping sap!

This is exactly why my husband and I are a good pairing - he is completely Logical Left brained; I am (obviously) the Free-thinking Right. It's an important balance to strike, not easy within one's own mind.
A good and thoughtful poem, Will!

[Will]

Opposites attract, evidently! Thanks for reading, Rita. I appreciate it.